IELTS Task 1: Birth and Death rates in Switzerland

Temans, again, need your input to help me score higher :-)

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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information concerning the rates of natality and mortality in Switzerland over a 50 year period between 1970 and 2020 based on data provided by United Nations Statistics.

Overall, the rates of natality almost rose consistently over the focused period while the mortality rates increased only in the first half period. On the other hand, the gap between the number of births and deaths observed was wider in the last half period which reached approximately over threefold in 2020.

As per the information, at approximately 1.2 million of baby born in 1970 and flattened out in next 10 years. This was followed by a slight increase in 1990. On the other hand, while the rates of natality was higher than mortality, it was no longer happened in 1980. In term of births, the was a significant incline from 1.7 million in 1990 to 2.7 million in 2000. While the rise of birth rates continued in the following year until the end of the period, the death rates decline gradually from 1990 onwards.

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Single graphs
Introduction: Here you should state what the graph shows
short body paragraph: state the most important piece of information here (summary/overview)
main body paragraphs: Here you need to make comparisons and state the important features of the graphs (usually 2 paragraphs)

Good introduction. :) Overall, the rates of nationality almost rose consistently over the focused period while the mortality rates increased only in the first half period . On the other hand, the gap between the number of births and deaths observed was wider in the last half period which reached approximately over threefold in 2020.

Overall, you've done a good job with this task. However, I like if you had two detailed paras :)

Yes, this is very very good writing, I must say :)
As dumi also mentioned, I too like if you had one more para for the body (details). I don't think it would be difficult for you :) You write very well and why not get the maximum score for this task? :D

How about time? Have you been able to finish it on time? If so, you are ready to take up the task :)