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What people should read?
TOPIC: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.
ANSWER
It is often believed that books, which are written about authentic occurrence, with affirmed truths and people are the best to read. In my opinion, I disagree with the suggestion that we should just read about books including accurate information only.
First of all, nearly all of books in the world are written imaginary. Authors often write about fictional contents and characters. The most two common categories of fiction books are comics and novel. These kinds of books easily attract and make readers cannot take their eyes from the very first chapter, as it is happening in life. For example, an extremely celebrated novel written by Margret Mitchell which "Gone With the wind" had shocked the world literary formerly, had no real occasion as well as character at all!
In addition to the concern above, I also believe that reading only about realities is a really boring thing due to the limited events that happen. We can easily read the happened things every day on newspapers or on our phone conveniently. As a result, it is definitely an unremarkable amount of real things occurred that we do not know if all of those circumstances are putted into a book. Furthermore, it is incomprehensible if you let a 6-years old boy read a political or historical book. He will never understand the complicated essence of the issues that the book would. This exactly exemplifies the boredom of books regarding real events and people.
In conclusion, importance of fictional books is undoubtedly undeniable, and I believe that they will always play an essential role in our life.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 The paraphrase is short by one sentence. You forgot to reference your opinion or reason why you disagree with the given statement. The instruction asked you whether you agree or disagree, and you had to reference specific reasons for your disagreement. So, 2 reasons presented, but not discussed within the opening statement.Your concluding paragraph also misrepresents the discussion as it does not offer a valid summary of the discussion points in your presentation.
Your discussions are a bit difficult to follow due to the improper sentence presentations. For instance, I was really confused when you said: "First of all, nearly all of books in the world are written imaginary. " What do you mean by written imaginary? I think you meant to say "are works of fiction." I believe this confusion is because you are not familiar with the book genres (sections) which are: fiction, non-fiction, young adult, children's books, and biographies. Comic books fall under children's books or young adult, depending upon the age target of the book. So your reasoning, that a child cannot be given a history book to read is incorrect. There are actually history books written for kids. For every adult book, there is a children's publication counterpart except for adult themed novels.
Another confusing presentation: "...novel written by Margret Mitchell which "Gone With the wind" had shocked the world literary formerly, had no real occasion as well as character at all!"
What do you mean by "literary formerly? The backdrop of that war was the American civil war between the North and South. The historical story was that of the freeing of the slaves. Why did you say that there was no real occasion? True, the characters were fictional but the historical reference was very much real. By the way, you are writing an academic essay. Practice formality in your presentations. That means, no triple exclamation points, no exclamation points at all.
Your take on the essay shows that you understood the prompt, but do not know enough about the topic to be able to offer a convincing and correct discussion regarding the topic. Your unclear sentence presentations indicate a lack of English vocabulary skills. Try to think and write in English. Do not think in your native tongue then translate it to English word for word. That is the most likely reasons why your sentence presentations do not make any sense.
At this point, I would have to say that you do not have the vocabulary and grammar skills with which to write a passing Task 2 essay. It would be better if you focused first on improving your sentence writing skills along with increasing your knowledge of current events and pop culture. These improvements need to be accomplished before you can start writing task 2 practice essays again. You may also want to review the other essays posted here first as a part of your learning process.
The works of the other students here should help you gain a better understanding of the Task 2 requirements and how to best present it in the essays. Don't just assume that because you put some words together in English, that it will automatically make sense. You need to learn the basics of English sentence structuring first. Learn to write complete short sentences first, then work your way up from there. Right now, you do not have the ability to write coherent English sentences and paragraphs yet.
