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Essay About Me - born in Indonesia



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Apr 1, 2012   #1
My name is Fitri Pratiwi. I am is 15 years old. I was born in Surabaya, 14th February 1997. Surabaya is one of many city in Indonesia. I have long black hair and brownish skin. My eyes is black too. Now, I'm school at 15 high school in Surabaya. I'm in 10th grade. My school is SBI. That is tittle for school which have international curiculum. My house is in east Surabaya. I live with my parents and my grand parents from my father. I'm the only child that my parents ever had. So, my father and my mother very love me and pround of me.

Two weeks ago, my classmate inform me that my school have a project. The project is choose some student from grade 10th and 11th for student exchange in Europe and Asian with some test. So, I want to join the test. I hope I can be the one of many student who have change to student exchange.

With this essay, I hope I can learn again if my English is bad. Thank you very much.

giorgio186 9 / 54  
Apr 1, 2012   #2
Why do you think that YOU should be the chosen one? Write it and support it with arguments.
chalumeau /  
Apr 1, 2012   #3
Giorgio--your comment doesn't make sense.
Would you please rephrase it?

Here's an attachment with corrections.
Let me know what you think.


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giorgio186 9 / 54  
Apr 14, 2012   #4
To chalumeau: Well, it should be an application essay, shouldn't it? So some points why to choose this particular person ought to be added. Or am I mistaken, and it's just about introducing oneself. If so, I'm sorry.


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