A breakdown of figure for holidaymakers visited five different countries - in millions

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A breakdown of figure for holidaymakers visited five different countries in millions is revealed in the line graph. Overall, it can be seen that there was an upward trend for all countries, and France had a utterly increase in 2010 over a fifteen-year period.

To begin with, there was a similar trend in some countries. Egypt and Brazil stood the same point at about ten in 1995, while Egypt existed higher number than Brazil in 2010 at about 20 and 15 respectively.

After that, the number of sightseers in Malaysia recorded at just above 20, while in USA appeared more than threefold bigger than of this in 1995. USA and Malaysia a slight went up between 1995 and 2000, while France extremely inclined from just above 30 to twice times greater than before. Furthermore, from 2005 to 2010 France significantly rose to ninety, while Malaysia gained a gradual decrease and met the same point with France by about 15 to just under 90 and the highest point happened in USA at just above 90, while Brazil illustrated the least popular destination at lower than 10 million.

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A breakdown of figure for holidaymakers visit five different countries...

Egypt and Brazil stood at the same point approximately ten in 1995,


, while Egypt existed higher number ...
while in USA appeared almost threefold bigger than of this in 1995.


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Furthermore, from 2005 to 2010, France saw a significantly rise to ninety,

... about 15 to just under 90. The highest point ...

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