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Business is an right investment for future despite of the economic crisis


wonnguyen 2 / 2  
Aug 1, 2014   #1
Economic crisis happen everyyear; no one can understand completely. So that is a risky choice to purchase. However, if I have money enough, I will invest in business because I might make more money; I also would like to be many challenges in busines, and help the unemployed.

The important reason for this why is that maybe I could make more money from my fund. Althought There are many people in bankruptcy, who have incorrect method or less fortunate in business, I still want to try it. That is not all of everyone, some businessmans are still strongly successful and make more profit in their business. Maybe I am one of those businessmans. Therefore, i could do a lot to respond to my private needs from my profit that is better than purchase a house.

On the other hand, I am willing to take more difficult because my major concern with business, I have to be changllenge. No businessman never used to be bankrupt I might get into a finance trap, and taste the defeats in business but that will help me taking a lot of experience and more mature to make the strong steps prepare for my next business.

In addition, i could give a job to anyone, who is out of work because the unemployed is a society issue. If my business is going up and making more profit, i could contribute a bit for my country. There will many operations, and I need more workers to help me run my business. All of that is very good in society and my personality.

In conclusion, this life is the struggle. No one don`t know what will happen in the future if we dont dare to think and dare to act. Despite of risk, business is an right investment for future.
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Aug 1, 2014   #2
Economic crisis happen everyyear;almost every year and no one can understand it completely.

Economic crisis happen everyyear; no one can understand completely. So that is a risky choice to purchase. However, if I have money enough, I will invest in business because I might make more money; I also would like to be many challenges in busines, and help the unemployed.

Well, this is a poor introduction. The reader does not have a clue about what your prompt is talking about. In the introduction, your objective should be to introduce the topic to the reader and state your opinion. In the body paragraphs you give reasons to justify your opinion and support them with examples.
OP wonnguyen 2 / 2  
Aug 1, 2014   #3
thanks for your comment. I will remember that


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