I think my essay is not good, quite simple so I need your advices.
Thanks you all.
There are both advantages and disadvantages to buying or borrowing books. However, according to my point of view, it is always far better to have books on loan than buying new books. Because of saving money for ourselves and book's resources for the world,
I prefer to borrow books than all.
The first reason can be obviously seen that borrowing books saves our money. Although it is said that we should not regret buying books, at present it might be unreasonable. My experience in this case is a good example and really changed my mind. I took six courses in the first semester in college and was required 3 to 4 books for each of them; that means 18 to 24 books in total. In addition, reference books are also expected by teachers who believe that no book is dispensable. Finally, a significant amount of money was used to pay for all books. And a financial crisis happened with me in this semester as a consequence. Therefore, it is more necessary to save our money than buying all books with regret.
Indeed, having books on loans from college libraries is not wasting action to book's resources because it is not any book we bought is used well. The books I bought in the first semester are one case of that. Because the reason that these books are not used in the next semester and it is difficult to sell them to other students in Viet Nam, my buying book is a lavishing action. Hence, I believe that borrowing books is the best way to economize on resources of books.
In conclusion, the advantages of borrowing books I have been discussed above, I assert that we should not waste our money and book's resources unreasonably. By saying that, I do not mean that buying books is a bad habit or unacceptable. What I want to stress is that saving is very necessary for our current life and the world later; therefore, let do saving as much as possible from smallest actions, like borrowing books.
Hi, are you Vietnamese? Just wondering cuz I am :). Well the part that I cross out doesn't mean that i didn't like your idea, its just my suggestion and it's easier for you to see the difference. You don't have to follow it whatsoever.
Ok first, this type of essay need for you to take a stand, so no passive words.
There are both advantages and disadvantages to buying or borrowing books. However, according to my point of view, (passive ) I t is always far better to have books on loanborrow books than buying new books b ecause of saving money for ourselves it would save money and book's resources for the world <-- i don't quite understand what you mean. ,
I prefer to borrow books than all. <-- you already said that at the beginning .
The first reason can be obviously seen that borrowing books saves our moneyis financial issue . Although it is said that we shouldwould not regret buying new books, at presentthe time it might be un reasonable. <-- I don't understand this sentence
My experience in this case is a good example and really changed my mind. I took six courses in the first semester in college and was required to buy 3 to 4 books for each of themclass ; that means 18 to 24more than 18 books in total. In addition, reference books are also expected by teachers who believe that no book is dispensableteachers also expected students to have reference books . To them, no book is dispensable . Finally,A significant amount of money was used to pay for all books. And a financial crisis happened with me in this semester as a consequence . --> As a consequence, I ran into financial crisis.
Therefore, it is more necessaryimportant to save our money than buying all books with regret.regretting buying new books.
Indeed, having books on loansborrowing books from college libraries is not wasting action to book's resources because it is not any book we bought is used well. --> Again i don't understand what you trying to say. I hope you didn't use the translator.
The books I bought in thefor first semester are one case of that. Because the reason that these books are not used in the next semester and it is difficult to sell them to other students in Viet Nam, my buying book is a lavishing action. Hence, I believe that borrowing books is the best way to economize on resources of books.
--> this whole paragraph basically just repeat what you have said before except for the part it is hard to sell it back. (So you are Vietnamese :)) By the way, in English Viet Nam is written as one word--> Vietnam
In conclusion, the advantages of borrowing books I have been discussed above, I assert that we should not waste our money and book's resources unreasonably. By saying that, I do not mean that buying books is a bad habit or unacceptable. What I want to stress is that saving is very necessary for our current life and the world later; therefore, let do saving as much as possible from smallest actions, like borrowing books.
--> Too passive. Make your stance, no one gonna hate you for it.
Sorry if it didn't help too much. I promise I will look at this essay again, probably tomorrow because I need some time to refresh my mind about your essay then i can give you better advice. It would help if you try to rewrite your essay than I can take a look at the new revision. Remember a strong essay needs at least 3 examples, you only give 1. Good luck.
thank you. I will write my essay again. I'm not really satisfied about it but I had no any ideas about this topic in that time. >.< I think I need to practice in writing much more. thanks so much.
Because of my desire to save money for ourselves and the resources consumed to manufacture books, I prefer t o borrow books than all.
Therefore, it is more necessary appropriate to save our money than buying all books with regret.--- I thought the word appropriate was more appropriate than the word necessary! :-)
By saying that, I do not mean that buying books is a bad habit or unacceptable. --- This is a very good sentence!
:-)
What I want to stress is that saving is very necessary for our current life and the world later future; therefore, let's save as much as possible with smallest actions, like borrowing books.
Very good!! You do not have too many mistakes, and your meaning is clear. You will do well on the toefl I think! When will you take it?
