Having money to buy a house or to start a business is a big advantage for each one of us.
Sounded a little awkward-- maybe you could try something like "Having enough
money to buy a house or start a business would be
a big advantage to anyone."
However, you might try something a little more hooking. Like, "What would you
do with enough money to buy a house or start a business?" and then end up with a thesis stating what *you* would do.
and in the same time financially independent.
the same time be
to improve your life standards.
-- to improve your standard of life.
I always liked to take the risk and be responsible for my choices.
"Always liked" is an awkward tense. Try this: "I always like" or "I believe in taking...and being."
I like to be my own boss
You said that already in the first paragraph. To avoid being redundant, try to change the phrase. ("I like to set my own goals", etc)
and I can make some researches
"I can research what needs to be done,"
put me in charge about my financial situation.
in charge of
to grow your earning to much.
to increase your resources significantly.
Maybe after the purchase the money is not going to be enough for renovations and furniture and other needs. Of course, the value of the house can grow in time, but even like that, how can you increase your earning? Also I have to consider that a house need maintenance which is another investment that maybe I am not going to be able to afford.
Maybe after purchasing a house, there would not be enough money for renovations or furniture. Even though the value of a house increases over time, this will not increase your assets. Also, houses require maintenance: another investment that I may not be able to afford.
To have a large income is a need, and only a profitable business can give me financial security. My dream house is a big, elegant one, and the only way to afford it is to start and grow a profitable business.