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[IELTS] CAM9 - WRITING TASK 1 - REPORT AN ISLAND BEFORE AND AFTER CONSTRUCTION


seabird88 2 / 3 1  
Aug 27, 2013   #1
TASK 1

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


P/S: Please review and give me your feedback. Thanks in advance.

ANSWER:

The two maps show the growth of an island before and after the construction for tourism.

It is clear that significant changes are made in terms of constructing new facilities like accommodation, the transport infrastructure and the use of the sea.

Looking at the first picture, we can see that there is a huge land surrounded by sea on all sides. The island is about 250 meters in length, with only trees in the west and the east. A large beach located on the western side is not used for any purpose.

By contrast, the second map describes the island after building a lot of tourist facilities. In the middle of the island, there is a reception block which is surrounded by a vehicle track that leads to the restaurant in the north. On the other side, the track also runs to the pier in the south sea of the island where tourists can go sailing. In the west and the east, many mushroom houses, which are connected by footpath, are built to accommodate guests. Furthermore, the beach now being used for swimming can be reached from the western accommodation through the footpath.


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shreyansh 4 / 8  
Aug 28, 2013   #2
i think its better to use another word for 'construction of tourism' as it is not looking good.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Sep 15, 2013   #3
Very good writing. You follow the right structure for this task too.

The two maps show the growth of an island before and after the construction for tourism.

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The two maps show the contrast of tourist facilities of an island before and after the construction activities.
You write well and wish you good luck with IELTS :)


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