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IELTS Cambridge 1 Practice - the Australian Bureau of Meteorology - writing report


ewshingshing 1 / -  
Aug 27, 2018   #1

report on weather changes



I am preparing my IELTS. Could anyone help me to correct my writing and give me some suggestions?? 1 essay at a time.

Task 1 Question
The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.


This is a report regarding to how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects immediate information on the weather so as to make reliable forecasts.

The weather information would first be collected via several facilities, radar for example. After analysis and forecasting, the Bureau would prepare and release the broadcast through different media.

First of all, for the information collected by satellite, it would be analyzed with satellite photo. Drifting buoy is another method for the Bureau to collect weather information as well. The information collected in this way would be forecasted and interpreted by making synoptic chart. The last access to get the information is radar, which is able to exchange information collected by satellite and drifting buoy. Radar screen is in turn contributed to analysis and forecasting process.

After analyzing and forecasting, information would be prepared for broadcast with computer. The weather information would be broadcasted in three main ways, which are via recorded announcement, radio and reported by newsrecorders.
giatocmang - / 1  
Aug 29, 2018   #2
my advice: you should paraphrase more on the topic sentence. for example
The diagram illustrates how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology receives, processes and broadcasts information on the weather through different media.

note that this is not a report
P/s: I may be pathetic:)


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