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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure.

I believe capital punishment is heavy punishment and should have been done under very excessive crimes like murder or killing in big dimensions(massacre),when there is no expectation for saving a murder.

All of us know when a person born he is not a murder and don't want to kill or violate or rape to any body.but before any judging about a criminal first we should see what is his backgrounds and his reactions has roots in what kind of troubles.

Different research shows many criminals had family's trouble in their life and
in many times their parents didn't had a warm relation they were divorce's children and they have lots of deficits in their childhoods continuing in life without any aspiration caused they didn't follow any reasonable aims in their life and have done every things that compensate their deficits.

Basically death penalty doesn't avoid increasing violence ,when a person perpetrate a crime ,statistically, in many times know about his retribution of his crime,but the question is, why he or she have done it again?

Since you didn't include what kind of assistance you are seeking, I have just made some general comments.

First, make sure you are using linking verbs correctly so that your sentences are structurally sound. For instance, "I believe capital punishment is a heavy punishment..." Also, make sure you are placing proper spaces between punctuation and words. For instance, "...(massacre),when there..." should be "...(massacre), when there..."

Make sure that your subjects and verbs all agree; when you are speaking about a singular object make sure that it does a singular verb. For instance, "...his reactions has roots..." should be "...his reactions have roots..."

Avoid using contractions in formal academic writing; always write out the full forms of the words you are contracting.

Make sure you aren't using run-on sentences, such as the last sentence of the piece. Try reading the sentence out loud to see where you naturally stop or get winded; that is where a period should be.

You could benefit from a grammar refresher, which would help with much of this essay. There are many guides online, or if you can get a hold of a copy, The Little, Brown Compact Handbook by Jane E. Aaron would be a great tool for you that I think would help you out immensely. You might be able to check it out from a library, or you can find it for sale on Amazon.

This is a great book that covers everything from spelling and mechanics to clarity and style; any questions you have I'll guarantee you can find in this book. Another good one is The Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers by Stephen Reid. It's much cheaper but you could also probably find this one at the library.

Best of luck!
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