such as the U.K.
as long as i know, the name of country is not followed by article 'the', exception for The United States
Also, the government receives taxes and mustutilizes it for a better lifestyle for people of all ages, especially the old.
(i'm confuse with this sentence)
Also, government receives taxes and utilizes which is better influences for helping older people.Having said that, family members of the aged individuals, who stay in homes, must ensure that they pay required money to the care centres as it is their primary duty to look after family elders .
please rewrite this sentence.
(pay attention with your grammar)You should recognise about five types of paragraph:
1. Sequence
2. Problem and solution
3. Cause and effect
4. Listing
5. Comparation and contrast.
you have to make this essay consists of approximately 4-5 paragraph. I suggest you to make 5 paragraph:
1. Introduction : general ideas, you should mention thesis statements.
2. Body 1 : detail of thesis statement 1
3. Body 2 : detail of thesis statement 2
4. Additional statement
5. Conclusion
You have to make your reader more curiously, do not make predictable paragraph. Moreover, coherent and cohesion are essential thing when you make every single sentence.