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TOEFL: 'career preparation' - reasons why people attend to schools


brisky 5 / 13 2  
Jun 4, 2014   #1
people attend college for several reasons like experience, carrer, knowelge. why do you think people attend college.give reasons?

Most of us go to college or university to get higher education after high school. Each human is unique and so do their reasons for going to college. Some attend college to get new experience or for carrer preapartion while others go there to have increased knowledge. The ultimate reason for attending college is to have a better bright future with a promising career.

First of all, universities or college helps us a lot in moulding our character and makes us a better human being. For instance, collages may be far from our home , so we need to stay near the college like college dorms or hostels. And there we have to share our room with other people. This makes us to adapt and cooperate with other people as it is necessary for our proffessional as wellas personal life. Now a days most of the children are from nuclear families and are tend to be more selfish. Living in these college hostels will help us a lot in changing our selfish behavior and become a better person. Next, I think of my college days are the best days of my life as it had gifted me with very good friends. Colleges are best places to built up healthy human relations.even some of my batchmates have found their life partners from there.Colleges arrange cocurricular activities like arts or sports fests. This helps the students in building up their academic as well as non academic skills. Further more, while studying in university we can even do some part time jobs, this helps us in future as we can familarize with working enviornment. Moreover , we can earn some money as well.

Secondly, inorder to have a promising future we need to have good education. The present day world is quite competitive and is very hard find a job. We need to be the best or else we will be rejected. Good educational background is really a good assest for us. In high school we learn about differnt subjects but in university level they fousess on a particular subject as it is necessary for a professional jobs. For example every one knows that all human beings have 32 teeth, but if we want to be a dentist we need to know several aspects about teeth. We need to have increased knowelge as it is the key factor in our professional life. Human always have a never ending quench for knowelege. University education might help them in fulfilling some of their desires. Theses colleges or universities have a libraries with a wide collection of books.

Thirdly, Career oriented education is the most important reason for people for going to college or universities. In india we have different educational institutions for differnt proffesions like dental , medical ayurvedic, enggineering and seveal other fields of study. I wanted to become a dentist , so I went to dental school to have dental education. Inorder to compete in this world we need to have a better educational background. These universities plays a key role in our life.

To summarize, people go to college for differnt reasons , among them the most important reason is career preparation, Without that we donot get a to chance to compete in this world.Better education promises a prosperous and fruitful future.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 4, 2014   #2
Most of us go to college or university to get (get is informal) higher education after high school (the opening sentence is a motivator, which should be catchy. U chose to write something general as a motivator, which is OK, but try to make it a bit attractive :) . Each human is unique and so (So is a bit informal) do their reasons for going to college (at the first sentence u said many people go to college to get higher education and the second one mentions that there are several reasons. There is a contradiction between the sentences, try to make these two sentences as one) . Some attend college to get new experience or for carrer(career)preapartionspelling while others go there to have increased knowledge. (It would be better to clearly mention that this is your own opinion and at the end of that point out why you took this position briefly as blueprint. ) The ultimate reason for attending college is to have a better bright future with a promising career.

hope this helps,
Good luck,
Cheers,
Ahmad
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jul 2, 2014   #3
Most of us go toattend college or university to getreceive higher education after graduating from high school. Each human is unique and so does histheir reasons for going to college.that decision.

I like if you chose the second sentence as your hook. Here we go;
Each individual is very unique and so does his or her reasons for pursuing higher studies after high school graduation.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jul 24, 2014   #4
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Nowadays

familarize

this is followed by a noun.

most of the children are from nuclear families and are tend to be more selfish. Living in these college hostels will help us a lot in changing our selfish behavior and become a better person.

are you sure this is the part of the idea asked?

This essay contains 550 words. Writing more words will not help you earn a good score. You'd better focus on cohesion and cohesive.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 24, 2014   #5
Well, this body para looks pretty heavy :D TOEFL Independent task has a major bearing on time. Therefore you need to manage time efficiently to get a great score at the exam. Had you managed time to complete this task it's fine. Otherwise stick to 4 para structure which helps you earn marks as well as manage time so well.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jul 24, 2014   #6
These universities plays

a subject and verb agreement.
Write: These universities play | The university plays

a libraries

write: a library | libraries

Inorder

In order

Further more

Furthermore

Many attention to basic grammar.


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