Driver is dangerous , with the people who do not concern or regardless about truly concentration.the car accident is leading of death cause , 75% of car accidents in people age 16 or 19 in The United States but,most of them have nothing to do with drug or alcohol.
For example,when the speaker being accident of crasing car in the first time, even she stepped on the brake precisely at that time and finally, air bag deployed and fortunately, no one was hurt.
The probem of car accident is , when they did not know of what they should want to do of imergency condition and what their most important to do or prioritizing to attend on the road and also to avoid on that accident, keeping going to enjoy the comfort trip but,occasionally they sense something wrong or it was too late after they realized it as In countless accident, many drivers say as like" l did not see it came''
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Hi Syukron, I believe this is the first time I will review your essay and before I do, I would like to WELCOME you to the Essay Forum Family, once again and I hope you will follow through with the suggested modifications.
First stop, this essay summary is quiet confusing, the words that you associate to form your sentences didn't seem to add up, therefore, please find a few suggestions below;
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- with the people who doare not concern
- or regardless about truly concentrationare not able to concentrate on the road while driving .
- the carCar accidents is the leading of death
- cause ,at 75%
- of car accidents in peoplewith an age group from 16 or 19 in
- The United States but,most of them havehas nothing
- For example,when theThe speaker
- beinggot into a car accident of crasing car infor the first time,
- evenwith a quick and alert mind, she stepped
- on the brake precisely at that time and finally ,the air
- know of what they should want to do
- of imergency conditionin an emergency situation and what their most important to do or prioritizing to
- attendattention on the road and also to avoid
- on thatthe accident,
- sometimes theykeeping going to enjoy the
- comfort of the trip
- but,occasionallythat when they sense something
- is wrong or it was too late
- after they realized it as Inand this results to countless accident,as many drivers say as like " l did not see it camecoming ''
Prompt: IELTS SUMMARY: MONTH IS IF CARS COULD TALK ,ACCIDENTS MIGHTCAN BE AVOIDEDBE AVOIDABLE
There you have it Syukron, as you can see, there's quiet a lot of modification to be done and I hope you follow through with the enhancements and keep writing.
