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Casting a light was a tricky business - utilized flames had to be applied into moving vehicles


rizaldohabibie 19 / 35  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
IELTS writing summary: First Headlamps

Before electricity was found, casting a light was a tricky business in which it just utilised flames to be applied into moving vehicles and the early trains travelled during the day due to the risk of the night.

The condition of the high railroad traffic in the late 1830s puzzled the schedule of train departures. Hence, the invention of headlamp was running after the "Track illuminator", in 1831, was invented. This invention was continued by many inventors until in 1851, the first electric headlamp was developed yet those were still with some drawbacks.

Train first became perfectly equipped with a battery-powered electric headlamp by Russia. French, afterwards, was the first which used steam generators to power the electric headlamps and it was followed by United States whose headlamps developed in 1897 and federal law required trains to have electric headlamps in 1916.

Automobiles, at the time, needed headlamps as well that the requirements were more stringent than those for trains and the Columbia Electric Car was equipped by headlamps in 1898. In almost all, despite all of difficulties in the invention, we just take it for granted today.

Fatirtalent 12 / 19  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
dear aldo

you're done very well, somehow there are several advices, please kindly take a look at following paragraphs.

... moving vehicles and the early trains only travelled during the day ...

... yet those were still with some drawbacks/weaknesses .

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ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Sep 19, 2016   #3
Rizaldo, you have a good writing there. I have several suggestions regarding your essay as follows:

- ... running after the "Track illuminator", in 1831,(it is not necessary to put comma here) was invented.
- ... by many inventors until in 1851,.(full stop, or you can put the word "during" here) The first electric headlamp was developed yet those were still with some drawbacks at the time.

- ... States whose headlamps developed in 1897 and.The federal law required trains to ...
- ... stringent than those for trains.(full stop)and The Columbia Electric Car was equipped bywith headlamps in 1898.
- In almost all(do you mean in conclusion"?) , despite all of difficulties in ...

That's all from me. I hope you can follow it through. Good luck with your practice!


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