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IELTS Writing Task 2 - Causes and solutions (Topic: Museums and Historical sites)

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Apr 22, 2017   #1
Question: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

locals tend to underestimate the value of places they live in

A number of monuments and museums primarily attract foreigners instead of the local. The primary cause of this phenomenon is the underestimation local people feel for these places and the most viable solution is an organization of events encouraging people to go to historical sites.

The principal cause leading to the shortage of local visitors is that they do not feel the need to visit the historical and cultural sites in their towns. As local monuments have already been familiar with citizens, they might find it boring to visit these places. As a result, they could influence their friends and families that local sites do not bring any value to their lives. For instance, a recent government survey found that 75% of people in Ha Noi refused to choose Ho Chi Minh Mausoleum as their destination because they found nothing exciting out there.

To tackle this problem, the government should hold special events, such as conventional games or festival at the monuments to motivate locals to visit these places. Organizing popular events could shed some light on this difficult situation and allow people to be more concerned about it. To illustrate, a similar initiative in China resulted in a 52% increase in the number of local visitors to important spots in their cities.

In conclusion, the number of foreign visitors is greater than that of local people in several historical and cultural places since locals tend to underestimate the value of these places. However, it can be addressed through conducting a variety of special programs there to stimulate local visitors.

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Apr 22, 2017   #2
Vuu, good work on writing 200 words for this essay. That sort of word count can definitely increase your chances of getting a higher score because you have a better opportunity of proving your abilities in the LR, C&C, and GRA sections of the essay. However, the GRA and TA section will not have a marked increase in scoring because you did not meet the 3 sentence minimum in some instances of the paragraphs within your essay. Always work towards meeting the maximum 5 sentence requirement per paragraph in order to better increase your overall chances. The way that you wrote the essay shows a clear understanding of the prompt. Although, this understanding had a little problem when it came to consistency in the presentation of your discussion. In the opening statement, you mentioned the locals at the start, then merely said "people" later on in the paragraph. "Locals" and "people" are two different things since "people" can refer to anyone. The correct term would have been "local people" in order to remain prompt specific and thus, increase your score.

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