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Ielts Task 1: Causes of worldwide land degradation (over-grazing, deforestation, over-cultivation)


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Jun 26, 2021   #1
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie chart illustrated the great causes of land degradation whilst the other chart mentioned how the consequences of bad agricultural land impacts on three regions in the 1990s.

Overall, the pie chart discussed three main reasons which over-grazing affected the most. Meanwhile, Europe was the area that included the greatest land degraded.
Accounting for nearly two fifths in total (35 percent) , over-grazing became the main point leading to debasement of the quality of land.
Standing behind it was recognised by deforestation with 30 percent and over-cultivation which took less than deforestation at 2 percent. Besides, others experienced the smallest number that was below 10 percent.

Relating to the region, the area which was regarded as the most significant land degraded was Europe at 23 percent . The second belonged to Oceania where overgrazing took up the most versus North America with over-cultivation and Europe with the others<b></b>



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Jun 27, 2021   #2
The writer has an incomplete image identification in the sense that the table chart was acknowledged merely as "the other chart" which is an incorrect image reference. Differentation is important due to the differing analysis and comparison reporting that is to follow the information summary. It created a partially accurate data representation in the paragraph.

There is an inconsistent reference to the actual measurements in the image. such non-use of the shared information lessened the report clarity per paragraph. The discussion for the table information totally avoided numerical references which made that report uninformative and confusing to the reader.

The writer must make more of an effort to prove his analytical and comparative skills in this presentation. The presentation can be considered only halfway complete at this point. It is nothing more than a cdraft that cannotbe scored accurately as more editing and writing has to be done to complete the presentation.


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