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Topic essay: Ernest Hemingway once commented, "As you get older, it is harder to have heroes, but it is sort of necessary."
I agree with Hemingway as one get older it is difficult to find hero. An older person with experience in life tend to be objective about life and the believe of hero decrease. On the other hand, a younger person need to have a hero because hero can show direction and provide example lead to those whose try.
Thus, I believe men and women of all age need hero. As a woman, I find that hero are especially important because our role is constantly redefined. Women today is not only need to have a successful career and to maintain resourceful to raising a family. For example, my parents is my heroes. As a new immigrant to these country with four children under the age of ten. My parents started a new life. Since I was a child both of my parents encouraged education is the key to success in life. All three of my sibling and including myself have had graduated from college with a good paying job.
The older I get the more I see hero is very important because they are the one provide inspiration for me to go on with the hard reality.