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IELTS TASK 2, Are celerities setting bad role models for the young because of their glamour?

Rumi2020 1  
Feb 13, 2018   #1
Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

a bad example for youngsters?

Given the fact that today's movie stars, notable musicians and singers are more well-known for their lavish lifestyles and material possessions, some people are of the opinion that this is adversely affecting the young's perception of the world around them by setting unacceptable role models.

Personally, I agree with this viewpoint for several reasons. Firstly, I think because young people lack knowledge and experience, they are highly vulnerable to be influenced by these so-called role models. The youth tend to imitate their lifestyles regardless of their own financial situations or personal styles. The young tend to have a desire to possess what these famous stars have. As a result, they put a lot of pressure not only on themselves but also on their parents as they aspire to the lifestyles of their favourite stars. In extreme cases, some even resort to committing crimes like theft to achieve what they want overnight, where it would not otherwise be attainable.

Furthermore, this unrealistic expectation among the youth forces them to pressure their peers to think and feel the same way and try to look up to celebrities as well. This results in some youth who may personally oppose the vain lifestyles to also conform and give in. These youth often end up having no other option but to follow the trend to avoid ridicule or being ostracized by their friends. According to a study that was conducted in Japan on behavioral patterns of more than 2000 teenagers, they found that the number of teens who followed celebrities' way of life, solely because of peer pressure was alarming. The study looked at the effects of glamorous lifestyles of celebrities, and found that 26% of teenage boys and girls imitate celebrities only to satisfy their friend's requests.

In conclusion, I believe that celebrities' lifestyles is of great importance to the youth and it impacts their culture a lot. If the youth don't follow the popular trend, they run the risk of being excluded from their peers which can be a big problem for them.

Holt [Contributor] 1549  
Feb 14, 2018   #2
Jawad, this is an "emotional" opinion essay because it asks you to present the degree of your agreement or disagreement with the given topic. References to terms such as "strongly, immensely, partially, fully, totally, marginally" are used to represent the "extent" of your opinion. By the way, the opinion should form the end sentence of the opening statement as this represents the thesis statement of the essay. It should not be used as a topic sentence in the second paragraph.

You only have 4 paragraphs presented for what is always a 5 paragraph essay. There are 3 body paragraphs that are meant to allow you to show off your English opinion writing skills in relation to your lexical resource and GRA abilities. Don't write just 4 paragraphs because that does not help you increase your scoring potential. It actually lessens it because you are not presenting the proper format for the essay and as such, you will have points deducted. '

With regards to your discussion points, don't refer to research information in reference to your opinion. Don't make it a habit to use outside references because the testing center will be on WLAN lockdown. You won't have exterior internet access at that time. Additionally, this is a bad practice to have during the practice tests because you are wasting time looking up information to help your opinion. Time is of the essence in this sort of test so you should rely on your common sense and publicly known opinions for the defense of your stance instead. You are not being graded on the sources, you are being graded on your ability to use the English language to explain your personal opinion so focus on the actual testing consideration. This is not a college research paper, this is an English usage test.
Feb 14, 2018   #3
In Paragraph one, you should write one or more sentence about thesis statement beacuse it can make your essay to be clear especially in the body paragraph. Morever, the contain in paragraph one should be correlated with the thesis statement....

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