THE CEMENT MAKING-PROCESS AND HOW TO USE IT as the component of buildings

Writing Task I (November 6, 2016)

The diagrams illustrate the processes of cement produced and how to use it as the component of buildings. Overall, the cement is produced and have treated by using some equipment which haS cylinder form and in rotated processes or by mechanic processes by some of the cylinder spin machines.

To begin, the limestone and clay are crushed by a crusher machine before mixing it with the powder by a mixer tool. After that, the blend of those materials is spin into the rotating heater by flame on the end of the pipe for heating processed. The last process that is grinded the raw materials until be formed the cement powder before the packaged process.

On the other hand, the cement then readily used for the components of buildings and the processes how to use it is simply enough. To make the good quality of bricks, besides of cement, we need water, gravel, and sand with each composition. In produces solid bricks we must blend gravels as the most component maybe 50% of the blends and then adds sand and cement in smaller composition than gravels where is just 25 % and 15 % severally and as the last pour water onto the blends but not too much just 10 % from entirely of the cement compound.

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... as the component of buildings .
... by using some equipments which haS cylinder form and ...

... those materials is(are) spin into the rotating ...

To make the(a) good quality of bricks,...

... as the component of buildings(concrete) . Overall,(it can be seen that)the cement (...) equipment which haS cylinder form and ...

I think your conclusion is not clear for the second diagram

... crushed by a crusher machine and the result is the powder. after that, it is mixed by mixer tool[/i]
I think you wrong interpret the powder

2. After that, the blend of those materials is spin into the rotating heater by flame on the end of the pipe for heating processed.
After that, the blend of those materials are spun by rotating heater that using flame on the end ...
be careful with passive

Hi. Here are my suggestions for you:

First of all, don't forget to upload the data/graph.

... limestone and clay as the raw materials are crushed by a crusher ...--> (the powder is the result of the crushing process)
The last process that is grinded the raw materials is grindedthenuntil be formed the cement powder are formed before the packaged packaging (when you are talking about process, use the V-ing rather than past participle) process.


try to find the similar meaning of percentage. for example you can write "50 percent" as "a half"

Goodluck and Keep Spirited.

... and how to use it as the component to produce concrete.
... are crushed by a crusher machine and the result is powder both of them. after that,it is mixed by a mixer tool.
The last process that is grinded (...) until be formed the cement and it packaged into the bagspowder before the packaged process.