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TOEFL; The 21st century has begun.What change do you think?


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May 11, 2013   #1
Topic Name:- The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.

answer,
In my point of view, everything changes in 21st century. You should go to other country in just few hours. Peoples use laptop, tablet and Smartphone as their needs. We can make new foreigner friend by using internet. Women cook food in just few minutes because they use more machines for cooking. There are many reasons that convince me, you can take care of your kid's by using mobile or smart phones. For example, now a day's students go to their college or school, their parents don't taking care about their safety because parent brought Smartphone for their daughter or kids. Kids attend their extra classes, parents anytime called them for asking about their safety.

Second reason is, you can use your laptop for finding new college or school for your kids. For example, my husband looking best school for my kids. My husband asked their friend but no one give him good suggestion. My husband finding school by using internet, he found school on web site and he is read review. That times my husband ready to admit my kids in this school. I am very happy because without any help we found best school for my kids.

Third reason, you can make more new dishes for your family. For example, last week I arrange party for my friend or relative. I cook more dishes in just few minutes because I use more electronic machines like, oven, microwave and grinder and I like to use those entire things. I cooked cookie or pizza and so on in just few hours. These were very new for my relative.

The 21st century is very fast because we can learn more things in this century. People take more advantages in their life. Technology brings more advance machines for human. We can learn more about our interested by using television, internet, news paper and magazine.
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May 11, 2013   #2
In my point of view, everything changes in 21st century.

... For this TOEFL task, you need to first introduce the topic to the reader. This should not sound like a direct response to your prompt. This is independent essay writing task and hence it should follow the features of an essay. Assume the reader does not know anything about your topic and introduce the topic to him. You can get lots of help from the prompt, but do not copy it one to one. Present it differently;

Today we live in the 21st century and, without any doubt, this century would make a leap forward in technological advancement.

Peoples use laptop

...."peoples" is wrong. The correct word is "people" which means a collection of individuals. So it is already a plural word and there is no necessity for having an "s" at the end to make it plural.


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