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[TOEFL] A/D Challenges are different from generation to generation


alice0209 12 / 18 12  
Aug 30, 2013   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The personal and work-related challenges that young people are facing are not different with their parents and grandparents faced when they were young.


While debating about generation issues, people always have different opinions. Some people believe that little things changed through generation, while others claim that generation differences are presented in every way. In my opinion, I believe that every prospective between generations alters and especially the challenges for this generation are significantly different from the last generation.

First, under globalization and industrial integration, the work-related challenges for this generation are getting more complicated and challenging. The successful people are those who can quickly respond to this rapid-changing world. In the past, focusing on one skill was enough to deal with the problems because every industry was rather small in size and simple to manage. However, as those industries expand and become internationalized, people are required to equip with multiple skills to answer those challenges. For example, now there are more chances to do business with people around the world, so besides one's own profession, language ability is essential as well. For another example, financial crimes are rampant in the 21st century, thus surging up demands for those who excel at both laws and financial management.

Second, this generation is encountering the self-recognition issue which could not be experienced by the previous generation. The past generation was given less freedom and was usually asked to follow the paths their parents had prepared for them. In contrast, young people in this generation are exposed to more creative ideas and rather think individually. They are eager for finding who they are and what they really want. It is fortunate that they can struggle with these sweet worries and these worries are indeed never easy for them. They have to make decisions between so many possibilities and they are responsible for taking the consequences.

In conclusion, challenges for this generation are more complicated and diverse than the past generation, whether in career or in self-identification. It is hard to judge which generation's problems are more difficult but it is no doubt that until the next generation, there will be whole new challenges waiting for the next youngsters.

p.s: I really care about the content of my essay. Please tell me if I made the clear point to the topic and whether my arguments and explanation are strong, thanks!!:)

dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Aug 30, 2013   #2
WhileWhen debating about generation issues, people always have different opinions.

People have different opinions about generation gap.

Some people believe that little things changed through generation, while others claim that generation differences are presented in every way

This is the sentence that talks of the background of the argument, and hence it should be more specific to give a clear idea about the argument.
chauuyenbinh 2 / 4  
Aug 30, 2013   #3
It is fortunate that they can struggle with these sweet worries, and these worries are indeed never easy for them.
joyhu 9 / 22 5  
Aug 30, 2013   #4
Sorry that I can't help you find out any problems.
But I do like the reasons that you used.
Besides, your structure is really good. =)
OP alice0209 12 / 18 12  
Aug 31, 2013   #5
To dumi:

Thanks a lot for your help! But I don't quiet understand your point.
About giving the background of this argument, do you mean that I should point out what kind of changes are? (like values changed through generation.)

Or I should just specify straight that it is the challenges that changed through generation?
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Aug 31, 2013   #6
Well, you've already done it in the introduction;

Some people believe that little things changed through generation, while others claim that generation differences are presented in every way.

This is it and that's fine. I just suggested you a kind of structure for your introduction. Sorry if I confused you. :)
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You write very well


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