I guess you write at least more than 330 words in this attempt? In a real test, do you think you are able to complete a 330 words writing within 40mins? I suggest that always control your word limit and time limit is good for you.
Humankind history shows that people have always been looking forward changes in various aspects. Flourishing new societies, new innovations, immigrations, etc, are the clear-cut instances that reveal the tendency of human being to change and manipulate his surrounded environment. All these examples, however, are regard to long-term changes. For te short period of time, people's attitudes toward change are different. Some think that change is a useful thing, while others prefer to continue rest of their life in a routine way. This essay tries to discuss both these viewpoints.
1. 89 words, my 1st paragraph in my body is about 100-110 words, your introduction is bit complicate to understand. the question is just simply ask you some prefer to do same thing in their life time, others prefer change is beneficial, discuss the both view and give your opinion.
2. "This essay tries to discuss both these viewpoints." this is so-called template sentences. Please try to write in your own word and give your position.
The belief of living with no change stems from several important psychological and physiological issues. People who have grown up in a static atmosphere without creativity, would usually like to maintain their situations. In fact, they are conservative individuals that always afraid of any changes. Secondly, some people inherently are cautious and conservative. It is shown that some characteristics are with people as they are born. In other words, they genetically live according to a routine schedule with no change. Consequently, this viewpoint is derived from the people's intrinsic and external environmental effects.
Personally speaking, this paragraph is supposed to present the advantages of unchanged life => this question is only use "same things", so that "same things" could be doing a job, or maintain a unchanged lifestyle. In another words, this is open style IELTS question, difficult to achieve good score in Task Response part, as it is open so anything is able to become your ideas.
Here is my ideas in the 2nd paragraph:
doing a unchanged job for relatively long period of time => advantages: internal promotion and a sense of security of their employment
maintaining a unchanged habit for a long time => advantages: minimise the risk to try new things (sometimes trying new things could cause financial lost), there are good reasons to keep a habit for life time such as mental and physical well-being.
I have prepared a topic " doing same job for same organisation v.s. change job frequently" is currently open in this forum. I think one of my ideas in the 3rd paragraph can be use in your question.