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The changeable amount of water used globally / number of miles traveled - Two IELTS


yoyolo 5 / 13  
May 23, 2011   #1
Cambridge IELTS 6 EXAM 1 TASK 1

The first line graph illustrates the changeable amount of water used globally between 1900 and 2000. It is clear to see that the largest water used was for agricultural purpose, it first increased gradually from 500 km3 to 1,000 km3 in 1950 and dramatically surged to 3,000 km3 in 2000. Meanwhile, water used in the industrial and domestic sectors maintained the similar level of above 100 km3 until a sudden rapid rose to 300 km3 and 1000 km3 respectively.

While the second table chart shows the differences in water consumption per person every year in two country of Brazil(26,500 km2) and Democractic Republic of Gongo (100 km2) as a specific example. Brazil used a huge amount of water in agriculture of 359 m3 compared with only 8 m3 per capital per year and this is because the agricultural land of Brazil is much bigger than D.R.C.

Cambridge IELTS 6 EXAM 2 TASK 1

The table graph shows the average number of miles traveled per person per year in England from 1985 to 2000.

It is clear to see that the average distance traveled in all modes showed an upward trend from 4,740 to 6,475 miles over the years. The most popular travel mode among English was still by cars, which surged significantly to 4,806 miles by 2000. Meanwhile, the preference on other three modes (by long distance bus, train, taxi) were increased as the same rapid speed as cars.

By contrast, people in England least chose the modes of walking, bicycle and local bus for average distance traveling in the year of 2000 rather than they did in the past. Apart from all the popularity of all travel modes, the English traveled more over these years.

EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
May 25, 2011   #2
The first line graph illustrates the changeable amount of water used globally between the years 1900 and 2000.

It is clear to see that the largest amount of water used was for agricultural purposes .

It first increased gradually from 500 km3 to 1,000 km3 in 1950, then dramatically surged to 3,000 km3 in 2000.

Meanwhile, water used in the industrial and domestic sectors maintained the similar level of above 100 km3 until a sudden rapid rise to 300 km3 and 1000 km3 respectively.

WhileThe second table chart shows the differences in water consumption per person every year in the countries of Brazil(26,500 km2) and Democratic Republic of Congo (100 km2) as a specific example.

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The most popular travel mode among the English was still by cars, which surged significantly to 4,806 miles ---surged from how many?

By contrast, the modes of travel least chosen by the English were...people in England least chose the modes of walking, bicycle and local bus for average distance traveling in the year of 2000 rather than they did in the past. ---Maybe you don't need this sentence at all?

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blazer 3 / 9  
May 26, 2011   #3
What have been the five most important scientific discoveries / inventions and how have they influenced the world?

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OP yoyolo 5 / 13  
May 26, 2011   #4
Thanks a lot for the corrections.
I hope that I could have the opportunity to help others' writting in my first language.
OP yoyolo 5 / 13  
May 26, 2011   #5
Thanks a lot!

Are you currently preparing for the IELST exam too? May be you'd better give me some general suggestions rather than corrections.


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