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IELTS Task 1 - The changes in the number of rental or sales of films (2002 - 2011)


Inastia47 7 / 10 2  
Apr 6, 2016   #1
The chart illustrates the number of films rental and sales (VHS, DVD, Blu-ray formats) in a particular store from 2002 to 2011. Overall, it can be seen that DVD was dominated since 2004 until in the end of the period. However there was a changing from selling VHS format to sale Blu-ray format.

The number of DVD' sales become the highest between 2004 and 2011. It started at 45.000 in 2002 and it also started to dominate at 175,000 in 2004. It increased gradually in 2007 and it reached a peak of 215,000. It still dominated until the end of the period, although it fell gradually from 2007 to 2011 at around 180,000.

Rental and VHS format experienced a fall, while Blu-ray format saw a growth in the number of films. Rental started at 185,000 as the highest in the beginning of the period. But it decreased steadily at around 55,000 in 2011. VHS format just sold between 2002 and 2005, it showed a steady decrease from 85,000 to 10,000. Interestingly, there was a new format, Blu-ray, which stood at no more than 5,000 in 2007 and it grew to 15,000 in 2011.




liv_ryu 13 / 22 6  
Apr 6, 2016   #2
Hi @Inastia47, let me give some corrections:
1. Pay attention for tenses, because the motion happen from 2002 to 2011, you have to use past tense .
2. For example :

until in the end of the period

Change into over the end of the period
3. I will try to make paraphrase in your first body

The number of DVD'sales become the highest [...] at around 180,000.

In the beginning of the period, DVD' sales stood at 45,000, followed by a dramatic increase over 2 year. Before reaching a peak of 215,000 in 2007, there was a step increased of DVD' market. It decreased gradually in the course of 6 years.
Hadiyati Fudla 9 / 14 3  
Apr 7, 2016   #3
Hi Inastia! You make a great writing. Let me give you some suggestios:

1. However, (it ia important to put coma after 'however) there was a changing from selling ...

2. The number of DVD'(s) sales become(became) the highest between 2004 and 2011.
It still dominated (you already use 'dominate' in the previous sentence, better you use the other alternative like 'still be the most favorite device ') until the end of the period, although ...


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