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Changing jobs frequently?I feel it's good to continue at least for six years (IELTS)


joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Dec 25, 2012   #1
People have different job expectations for job. Some people prefer to do the same job, for the same company. Others prefer to change the jobs frequently. Write advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint.

In this modern fast world everything is keep on changing. It is applicable to jobs too. Some people prefer to change the jobs or even the workplace constantly, while others hesitate to adapt the frequent changes. I my essay I will explore the benefits and drawbacks of both views.

Working for the same company for a long period of time might help people to establish a solid position in that company. As they know the routine of the company and the higher authorities, it will be helpful for them to maintain a smooth relationship with work and life. Their long experience and loyalty are beneficial for higher benefits such increment in salary, bonus, pension and so on, according to seniority. Furthermore, this offers respect from other employees and they become eligible for higher position or promotion. Most importantly, the steady income, and job security are pivotal in this age of economic crisis to lead a standard life. Moreover, they can plan their future in a better way and the savings for future gives financial security and peace of mind. For instance, they can plan the higher education of their children early by starting a small recurrent fixed deposit from their regular income. As it is a small amount, it will not affect the budget and in future, it becomes a big amount. However, the monotonous job may feel boring or de- motivated for so many people and their quality of work may suffer.

On the other hand, there are so many reasons to support changing jobs. Chief among this is that, as they are more versatile and dynamic, they are able to cope with the challenges in their work place in a better way. Another point is that, it improves their employability. Working in several different jobs means that they have more skills. Additionally, constant changes enable them to enrich their life experiences, which is an integral part of an exciting life worth living. They will never get bored in one job or left unemployed, as they have differential skills. Nevertheless, employers may not trust in these people, as they are not loyal. Apparently, the continuous shifting of houses, schools are detrimental for leading a steady life. The problems and challenges of a very new environment are not always favorable. The insecure jobs and income may put their life in a miserable condition.

In conclusion, be loyal to a company and changing jobs frequently has its own merits as well as demerits. One should think deeply about it before choosing either. In my perception, I favor in continuing one company or same job, at least for a period of six yrs.
christyzhongs 7 / 21 1  
Dec 25, 2012   #2
I my essay I will explore the benefits and drawbacks of both views.

Hi, you would better not use such 'template' sentence in your essay.
for example, you can revise it as following:
I will explore the benefits and drawbacks on changing jobs frequently.

As the essay didn't ask you to provide your opinion, you no need to state your view at the end.

Your essay with 441 words, it's too long for a IELTS essay.
YanSun 4 / 7 3  
Dec 25, 2012   #3
IIn my essay I will explore the benefits and drawbacks of both views.

Chief among this is that, as they are more versatile and dynamic, they are able to cope with the challenges in their work place in a better way.

Are you sure the 'Chief among this is that' here correct?

I thought your argument in paragraph 2 should be for the constant job shifting, while the above seems not.

has its own merits as well as demerits. One should think deeply about it before choosing either. In my perception,

Are these 'templete sentence'?

Welcome for further discussion.

Merry X mas!

Peter
OP joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Dec 25, 2012   #4
Hai Peter..
Thanks for the greeting and wish you the same..

I am really happy to read 'open for discussion'

I organized my essay, in this way, one para on each view, which include merits and demerits of one view.
So i included it...

Chief...
I think the meaning of this is the most important one...
I believe that adaptability is the most important factor in any where in our life..versetile and dynamic improves their personality more...correct me if it is not true..

You are welcomed to ask or discuss further, in any opints in my future essays too.
Thanks..

Tessy.

Hai cristy...

Thanks for correction..
I am aware of the conclusion and word strength...
Thanks a lot...

Tessy...


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