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IELTS Task 1: Channel one news viewing figures

tiaDS 73 / 235 52
Jun 3, 2014   #1
The line graph illustrates the average daily viewing figures for Channel One News, namely the 1pm, 6pm, 9.30pm and 11pm News over a 12-month period, from January to December.

It is noticeable that the three News programs start in the beginning of year, while only the figure for 11pm begins in May. Standing in contrast, the 1pm, 6pm and 9.30pm News incline no longer significant over the year, but the figure for 11 pm News has a reverse figure.

In January, the number of 6pm New occupies the highest number of viewers in Channel one news at just over 4.5 million watchers, while the lowest number of viewers a day is sat by 1 pm News at about 1.2 million viewers. The figure for 9.30pm slowly increases from above 3 million viewers to around 3.8 million watchers between January and May, a rise of about 0.8 million audiences. However, after a short peak in April the figure for 6pm News slightly declines almost gaining same figure as 9.30pm News in May, whereas the millions of viewers per day for 1pm News stands without any significantly movement. In any case, the new program of Channel one news appears in May which is 11pm News and records 0.2 million viewers.

The figure for 11pm News has a gradual increases from just over 3.3 million to around 3.5 million watchers between May and July. It climbs a slight incline and reaches a peak at around 4.1 million viewers a day in August, exceeding the total of viewers for 9.30pm News programs plummet, hitting a low-point of 1.1 in the same period. On the other hand, the general trends for 6pm News downwards until November. Having said that, following 12 months there are no longer significant increasing for three News programs, while the figure for 11pm News declines gradually throughout and ends the year at just under 1 million viewers per day.

Anh Nguyen 265 4 / 11 3
Jun 3, 2014   #2
Dear tiaDS
In my opinion, you generally had a well-organized essay. However, I have another idea of your summary paragraph: one sentence for the overall downward trend of the graph over the period, and another one for the highest drop of 6 p.m News. These are only my subjective opinions.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93
Jun 3, 2014   #3
over a 12-month period, from January to December.

.. over a calendar year
It looks like an long essay. Please be considered to make it in 20 minutes.
andial 21 / 48 3
Jun 3, 2014   #4
It climbs a slight incline and reaches a peak at around 4.1 million viewers a day in August,

It climbs to.. , I think it is redundant to write "climbs a slight incline"

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