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Whether TV channels should balance the time of sport shows for both genders, or not


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Aug 30, 2021   #1

Today, TV channels provide men's sport shows more than women's sports shows. Why?



People have different opinions about the time of men's and women's sports broadcasts and whether TV channels should balance sport shows the time for both genders. This essay will give the pros and cons of this case.

On the one hand, it is unnecessary to give equal time for sports programs between men and women. The first reason is men spend more time watching sports shows than women do. Women often use most of their free time for looking after their children and doing housework, so they do not have time to watch TV. Moreover, males are more likely to love sports than females. Women prefer watching game shows or shows about shopping or lifestyle to watching sports games. In addition, Tv channels believe that men's sports show provide a lot of money for them and give a higher rating.

On the other hand, I think Tv providers should balance time for male' and female' sports shows. Nowadays, women become more and more modern, they need to have a healthy life. Therefore, having more sports shows is important to help them keep fit. For example, TV Channels can create yoga shows or some shows to help them do exercises. Having these shows, women can do exercises at home, they need not do to centers. This helps them have time to take care of their house and their kids as well. Furthermore, these useful shows can increase ratings and profit for TV channels.

In shorts, it is significant for TV companies to equal sport shows the time of both men and women. In my point, promoting the field of women's exercises is so extremely necessary
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Aug 31, 2021   #2
The writer does not have an established response line for the questions provided. A discussion of pros and cons is not required for this discussion presentation. The writer should be focused on providing the topic responses to the questions, which will create the discussion outline for the 2 reasoning paragraphs.

Using "On the one hand" and "On the other hand" for 2 non-connected discussion topics tends to confuse the reader. These filler phrases only serve to mislead the reader, who ends up confused reading the paragraphs, which are clearly not related to one another as the paragraphs respond to 2 different questions. Use topic sentences as the lead in for the paragraph to clearly inform the reader of the paragraph discussion content. This will help to increase the coherence and cohesiveness of both the individual and connected paragraphs. I must emphasize that in these types of discussions, a transition sentence at the end of the first reasoning paragraph will help to better connect the discussion topics and paragraphs.


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