will outline my reasons in the following essay.
This does not qualify as a targeted, direct response to the question "Why is this the case?" The "Why" part that you have to respond to helps / supports your opinion by allowing you to present your thesis statement. This thesis statement that tells the examiner why you believe something assists in portraying a clear opinion and, introducing the topics for upcoming discussion. Simply saying you will outline your reasons in the paragraphs does not meet the clarity requirement for the direct response questions.
You have only 40 minutes to write this essay. Based on the quality requirements for the scoring presentation, it will appear that you should not be spending all that time writing 359 words. You should be focused on presenting simple, clear and focused discussions. Not overly long presentations that take too long to get to the point. It is a must that you allot the last 10 minutes of the task for proof reading and editing. Otherwise, you are risking leaving your errors in the essay, and intentionally lowering your scores within the individual grading considerations.
Do not present conflicting discussion paragraphs. This is a single opinion essay. So the focus has to be on your opinion as presented in the thesis statement. You are not asked to compare both sides, just one, the one you believe in. Do not confuse the discussion because the examiner will only score you on the parts of the presentation that support the original opinion. That normally results in a less than minimum word count presentation in most essays.
When the irrelevant paragraph is removed, you end up with 232 words out of 250 in this presentation. The word deductions applied to the essay will more than likely contribute to a failing score when all the errors and deductions are added up.