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tippabim 3 / 6 1  
Jan 5, 2014   #1
What do you want most in a friend-someone who is intelligent, someone who has a sense of humor, or someone who is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice.

"No man is an island". This is the proverb meaning that everyone can not definitely live without others. This is the reason why people have to have friends. There are completely dissimilar types of peers. Apparently, different persons need different friends' characteristics. From my perspective, the most personality of my best friends that I value highly is credibility.

Let's try to imagine that we are betrayed by our best friend. How do we feel at that terrible situation? Yes, we will completely feel deeply regret and that feeling will not disappear forever. Since, you lay your trust on him totally more than others. Therefore, I always perceive that I will never choose some friend who not sincere in order to prevent that worse circumstance happened to me later.

Admittedly, people having clever friend gain great strategies to solve some problems while people having humorous friend are always fun. However, it is just one moment that never last. On the contrary, if we have some friend is reliable to us both in front and behind, we will significantly live feel a bliss of happiness. As such that kind of friend will always help you, stand by your side whenever you are facing any tremendous impediments in your life. Sometime when you lose your confident, he will come to encourage you to go forwardly with determination. Or even you accomplish your ultimate goals, he will feel appreciate with your success sincerely. Furthermore, when you have to do something more necessary, you will usually trust on him to take an important role in your task. These are only little the advantageous parts that you will gain from this credible friend.

Who will be able to deny the important of reliable person and try to choose this person to be you best friend? I am the one that always seek that one who I can say totally that he is my best friend eternally.

I try to write this essay within 30 minutes. Therefore, I could see some mistakes in my essay.
I would be appreciated if you give compliments to me. Thank you so much. ^^

fiftyskye 4 / 14  
Jan 5, 2014   #2
Sometime when you lose your confidentdence , he/she will come to encourage you to go forwardly with determination.

Furthermore, when you have to do something more necessary, you will usually trust on him/her to take an important role in your task. These are only littlethe advantageous few of the parts thatbenefits you will gain from thisa credible friend.

Who will be able to deny the importanttance of a reliable person and try to choose this person to be you best friend? This sentence is ackward . Try to rephrase . I don't clearly get what you mean.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 9, 2014   #3
"No man is an island". This is the proverb meaning that everyone can not definitely live without others. This is the reason why people have to have friends. There are completely dissimilar types of peers. Apparently, different persons need different friends' characteristics. From my perspective, the most personality of my best friends that I value highly is credibility.

This is a very good introduction except for the last line. I think you can present that idea much better :)
In my view, it is the credibility that I value most in my friends.

Let's try to imagine that we are betrayed by our best friend.

First tell the reason and then support it with an example;
There is no purpose of having friends who would betray you when you need them the most.
Now support this idea with an example.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Feb 2, 2014   #4
Admittedly, people having clever friends gain great strategies to solve some problems while people having humorous friend are always fun

Admittedly, intelligent friends help us find great solutions for our issues while the friends with humor keep our lives more lively and entertained.

However, it is just one moment that never last.

However, these characteristics come in our aid only when there are momentary needs.

On the contrary, if we have some friend is reliableto usboth in front and behind , we will significantly live feeling a bliss of happiness.

"in front and behind" sounds a bit awkward and meaningless. Reliable means reliable in every circumstance :D
Also, you need to pay lots of attention to your grammar :)


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