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Characteristic of business models.


cylimitless 1 / -  
Jun 24, 2016   #1
There must be a lot of grammar mistakes plz help me with it. Please change the first and second person point of view into third person. Thank you all!

Now We have known deeply about the importance of business model. But How can we invent, design or realize new buiness model systematiclly? How can we question,challenge or transfer those obsolete business model?If we are committed to this , How we can transfer those visionary ideas into business model to challenge the rules of game or reborn it`s vigour.

The idea behind business model is to develop company framework in order to achieve customer value maximization, the elements of the inside and outside can make the enterprise run together, form a complete efficient operation system with unique core competitiveness, and through the optimal realization forms to meet customer demand, realize the customer value, at the same time, make the system achieve sustained profitable overall solution.

Every business model innovation can bring a competitive advantage in certain time to the company. But time flies by , the company must continually to rethink the design of its business. As consumer values from an industrial transfer to another industry, companies must constantly change their business model. The success or failure of a company is ultimately depends on whether it's commercial design can meet the demand of the priority of consumers.

Generally enterprise will meet one problem, When enterprise growth into a larger scale. They will need more investment to supporting their company or research new technology. From where I stand this problem already exist before your company was established. When you design your company you did n`t really think out a good solution to solve financial problem. Which means your business model are not really maturity. You can not do what you just have only one or two steps in your mind. You have to get a complete plan,that is the rudiment of a business model. A complete business model must be a closed loop, Each steps of sales have to be defined before you start to sell. A mature business model will not get return after investing several years . There will be several different profit points in different terms.

but if it has their own suitable efficacious , profit model is the key point of success . In some way ,business model is your company get your profit via which way. For example Beverage company get benefits by sell drinks ,supermarket get benefits by platform and store goods . But nowadays market demands become more and more distinct, all kinds of resources had defined more accurate. Business model already beyond its old form . Originality instead of old business model ,including :product/market concept ,services concept ,supply chain concept , the new system which constitute a mix system is needed combining market demand and resources.

Business model must have the following two characteristics. Business model to be considered as a whole, the concept of system, not just the composition of a single factor. Such as revenue models (advertising, registration fee, service charge), to provide customers the value of (on price competition, competition) on the quality, organizational structure (sui generis business unit, integration of network capacity), etc. These are important parts of the business model, but not all.

Part of the business model must have the inner link between, the intrinsic relation between each component, so that they support each other, work together, forming a virtuous circle.
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Jun 24, 2016   #2
Yuan, I would like to help you by correcting your grammatical errors by focusing on the first two paragraph of your essay. I hope that in the rest of the paragraphs, you would be able to understand something, and then you are able to proofread your essay by yourself. However, it is also possible for other members or contributors in this forum to help you check the rest of the essay.

1st paragraph:
- Now, Wethe majority of people have known deeply about the importance of business model.
- ButHowever, how can wethose people invent, design or realize a new buinessbusiness model systematicllysystematically ?
- How can wethey question,challenge or transfer those obsolete business model? (space needed) If wethey are committed to this...
- ...committed to this, howwethey can transfer those visionary ideas intotowards business model in order to challenge the rules of game or reborn it`sits vigour.

2nd paragraph:
- The idea behind...........................overall solution. (read again this paragraph, you ONLY made 1 sentence in a paragraph. How come? you need to remember a good and strong paragraph should have at least 3 sentences. The idea is to have you present a complete thought and understanding of all the aspects of the information you were provided. By limiting yourself to only 1 sentence per paragraph, you failto display your ability to express yourself in the English language)

Let me help you separate this sentence:

- ...to achieve customer value maximization.(stop right here, separate the sentence)The elements of.............. meet customer demand.(stop right here, separate the sentence)Then, it is also possible for the company to realize the customer value...

There you have it Yuan, I hope you can follow through the feedback given. Good luck in revising the rest of the essay. :)
VadimKlimenko 4 / 10  
Jun 25, 2016   #3
Hi Yuan Chang,

Please find some suggestions for your text.

... those obsolete business models

The success or failure of a company is ultimately depends ultimately on whether it's its commercial design can meet the demand of the and priority ies of consumers.

Generally enterprise will meet one problem, When enterprise growth into a larger scale. They will need more investment to supporting their company or research new technology.

While growing, an enterprise requires additional investments either for organic growth of the business or for research and development of a new technology.

Hope they will help you to review the whole document accordingly.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jul 5, 2016   #4
Hi Yuan, I would like to share my thoughts on your writing project.
First of all, the presentation of your essay is rather unusual, you don't put a space between the last word of your sentence before you put the period, it should be right after the last word. Also, the paragraphs are, yes with indentation, however, this is not necessary for your article.

Furthermore, the way your ideas are written is not in the format where one can see the uniformity as well as the logic behind the ideas. I can also see that you have received quiet a modification here from one of our EF contributors and I hope you follow through. Also, I understand that you would like your essay to be as creative as possible, you also used words that are considered relatively deep English, words that are not used is daily normal conversation, though this is accepted, however, as you are writing a quiet complex topic, it pays to use daily conversational English words, this will not only provide you with a clearer perspective but will also give you a whole lot of room in expressing your ideas in a manner that you yourself can understand.

There you have it Yuan, I hope my insights helped and I wish to review the revised essay soon.


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