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Who should be in charge of activities related to scientific research?


linhlinhlinh 1 / 1  
May 25, 2018   #1
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

scientific research - by government or by private companies?



It is commonly believed that the governments should be in charge of activities related to scientific research in lieu of private firms. I completely agree with this view.

On the one hand, the aforementioned solution could be effective due to the fact that there are a multitude of dangers created from scientific work, which is operated by private business. The principal reason here is that the companies virtually gravitate towards concerning their productivities and profits and totally ignore the harmful effects of these researches. For example, the use of animals in scientific and medical research has been a subject of heated debate for many years. In spite of its unavoidable benefits, some companies would carry out their research on animals illegally, leading to the serious degradation of ecosystems. Therefore, it seems sensible that private firms should not be empowered to manage the scientific research.

On the other hand, I firmly believe that the governments could adopt essential policies to operate the research effectively. One of the feasible methods is that universities specialized on science would be authorized to conduct high quality research. Accordingly, their professors and students with expertise in specific field could apparently partake in the research's progress and share their knowledge. Moreover, the authorities should allocate funding on the prior area of research. For example, the past decade has witnessed the great advantage of renewable energy, such as the invention of motorcycle using solar power, which would actually change the world, meaning that it could help reduce the gas emissions and air pollution.

In conclusion, I strongly agree with the standpoint that the government should bear the responsibility for scientific research.

this is my first essay posted here. hope u guys can read it and give me some advice to correct my mistakes, and estimate band score if possible. Many thanks

auralfat 1 / 1  
May 26, 2018   #2
in your second paragraph the main idea or Topic sentence are mentioned. But it just mention the negative effect not more specific in what subject..

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May 26, 2018   #3
Hamster, this essay is not written in the correct format. This is a single opinion, agree or disagree essay. It is not an emotional essay either since the question does not pose an "extent" question. As such, the response you have written is only partially correct due to the incorrect format applied to the discussion. All IELTS Task 2 essays as single opinion discussion presentations on the writers part unless the specific instruction of "discuss both points of view" is provided in the original discussion.

Therefore, this essay should have focused its 3 body paragraph development on the basis of your simple agreement with the given topic. There was no need to exaggerate your response with "completely" or "strongly" as the essay did not require that in the presentation. By doing so, you created a prompt deviation which led to the scoring down of your overall essay. Based on these observations in your work, I believe that the most appropriate score that this can receive is no more than a 4.

However, the main reason for the major points deduction is the "both points of view" discussion that you decided to present. This ran counter to the expected response format, which was the development of the reasons that support your agreement with the aforementioned statement. Do not discuss the essay in a manner that runs counter to the original presentation. That is the most common mistake made by students when responding to the Task 2 essay. That is also normally the reason why the student gets a failing score in the test.
OP linhlinhlinh 1 / 1  
May 26, 2018   #4
thanks so much for your advice


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