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IELTS chart - the nutritional consistency of two dinners


pakias 5 / 14  
Nov 19, 2013   #1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners.

Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

Write at least 150 words

The pie charts compare the nutritional values of two different types of dinner: Medium Baked Potato and Macaroni.

It is obviuos that the carbohydrates has the largest section in both types of food. However, in Macaroni, the quantity of carbohydrates is larger; occupying 52% of the whole percentage while 35% represents the amount of carbohydrates oresent in Medium Baked Potato. Another type of food is protein which is the second largest sector in the Medium Baked Potato, namely 25%. On the contrary, protein in Macaroni are fount in lower quantities. Therefore, it occupies 11% which is the same percentage of glucose present in Macaroni dinner.

Moreover, the percentage of glucose in Medium Baked Potatois higher than that in Macaroni by 2% where other nutrients have the exact same percentage of glucose in Medium Baked Potato. This is completely the opposite to. Other nutrients in Macaroni which is third less the value of the unspecified nutrients in Potato. Last nutrient present is saturated fat which is in higher proportion in Macaroni, namely 21%. This is nearly double the percentage of the same nutrient in Medium Baked Potato.




Pahan 1 / 1,908 553  
Nov 19, 2013   #2
The pie charts compare the nutritional values of two different types of dinner: Medium Baked Potato and Macaroni.

... good introduction :)

It is obviuos that the carbohydrates has the largest section in both types of food.

This is report writing, so let's put it in a more reporting style :D
As per the graphs, the largest portion of nutrient values consists of carbohydrates in both types of food.

It is obviuos that the carbohydrates has the largest section in both types of food. However, in Macaroni, the quantity of carbohydrates is larger; occupying 52% of the whole percentage while 35% represents the amount of carbohydrates oresent in Medium Baked Potato. Another type of food is protein which is the second largest sector in the Medium Baked Potato, namely 25%. On the contrary, protein in Macaroni are fount in lower quantities. Therefore, it occupies 11% which is the same percentage of glucose present in Macaroni dinner.

.... this second para should give an overview of the graphs to the reader. So, don't go into much details of statistics here. Discuss the major trends briefly. The first sentence is fine for this purpose. Tell them some more observations of major trends and in the third para, give more details with statistics.
OP pakias 5 / 14  
Nov 20, 2013   #3
Pahan
It seems like you are experienced and professional :-) . Thank you for the feedback, really.


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