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Writing Task 1, The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations


Delvisyendra 6 / 7  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The breakdown of information regarding the sleep patterns such as asleep and awake of people who have five different professions according to Canadian research. Overall, it can be seen that students have slepping regularly despite of truck driver, while lack of sleep is experienced by doctor .

Looking for the graph, from 7.00 am, marginally the majority of people already begin to do their activities where students are going to shcool and employess are bound by job towards their office. While doctors who heal the disease of patient have to come to the hospital earlier. In contrast, housewifes who undertake daily activity stay at house, nevertheless after finishing their job casually they are asleep suddenly. In the same time, truck driver has to take a rest a moment over 3 hours each morning and afternoon.

Moving to the next time, from 10.00 pm, this condition is used by mostly people to sleep, however doctor is still waiting their patients to sleep. While truck driver have to continue the trip taking items or passengers to fulfill a request.



WasishaSisha 16 / 20  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hi Delvisyendra,

Here's my notes:

it can be seen that students have slepping regularly despite of ...----> be careful with misspelling - SLEEPING

and employess are bound by ...---> misspelling, it should be "EMPLOYEES"


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