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IELTS Task 1 The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of ......


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Jul 18, 2021   #1
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



The pie charts display the average percentages of three types of nutrients consumed in different meals particularly in the US.

Overall, the majority of the sodium and saturated fat are been ingested at dinner, whereas most of the added sugar is from snacks. Yet none of the ingredients are consumed beyond 50% in single meal.

It is noticeable that all three nutrients of breakfast constitute the smallest proportion in every pie chart, accounting for 16% in the charts of both saturated fat and added sugar, as well as merely 14% in that of sodium. The sum of sodium from breakfast and snacks is almost the same as of lunch. In contrast, only 19% of added sugar is originated from lunch, which is close to three times lower than the combined ratio of breakfast and snacks. Additionally, people in the US consume 37% of saturated fat at dinner, which is equal to the coalesced percentage of lunch and breakfast.

*The figure is originally from Cambridge IELTS Book 14.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,857 4178  
Jul 19, 2021   #2
The writer should have used 4 paragraphs here as there are 3 comparison images. The summary failed to identify what each pie chart represents along with the meal types, and measurement basis. These are the reasons why the information enumeration is needed in this section. Failure to do so shows an early incomplete study of the image.

Since the study results are assumed to be currently ongoing since no year references are made, present time indicators are used. " Are been" is not only grammatically incorrect, but also makes a confusing time reference. The writer will do well to undertake more time reference sentence exercises.

The analyzed data requires another paragraph presentation for proper presentation and information dissemination. 5 properly presented, non - confusing sentences per paragraph would have helped. The comparisons could have been better presented in that manner.


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