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# The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spending

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Oct 15, 2021   #1

## number of households using electrical tools for housework

The line graphs illustrate the proportion of households using electrical tools for housework and using hours in every family weekly between 1920 and 2019.

It is obvious that the percentage of housewives choosing to use the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner was an upward trend during the research period. In contrast, It was the unstoppable fall in the number of working hours which housewives spent on household chores per week.

As can be seen from the first chart, In 1920 there was no household used refrigerator in their home. However, this number rose rapidly to 100% of households after 80 years and remain stable from 2000. Likewise, the growth of the proportion of vacuum cleaner users was similar to the refrigerator one, but it reaches its top at 100% of housewives in the year 2000 and remains unchanged. Moreover, the percentage of housekeepers chosen to use washing machines was made up the highest at 40% in 1920, which then fluctuated slightly and got over 70% of users in 2019.

At the same time, the amount of time which housewives spent on household chores per week decrease dramatically by 40 hours all over the period.
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Oct 17, 2021   #2
The line graphs

How many line graphs are involved? Does each graph represent a different data set? How are these identified? The summary overview lacks clarity and proper information separation. Consider using a more detailed and individualized summary next time.

, It was the unstoppable fall in the number of working hours which housewives spent on household chores per week.

That resulted in what? The sentence structure is jumbled, resulting in a confusing reference. When presenting a trend, do not overcomplicate things. One trending reference is enough. The other trend can be part of a report paragraph instead. It will help you avoid creating confusing sentence structures such as this one.

For the number of charts, you mentioned a "first" chart . So there are several other images? What happened to the other numerical ordinals? The paragraph further adds to the confusion of the paragraph content.

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