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check and grade IELTS Task 1 Diagram and table are attached


kimkitty 1 / 2  
Feb 15, 2014   #1
Passage 1 Total words 175
The given diagram describes the process of making yogurt. It can be seen that there are six steps in this process.

At the first step, we keep milk in a pot at 90 degree Celsius or 200 degree Fahrenheit for around 30 minutes. It is noticeable that we get more thick yogurt if we keep it for more time like this. Then, the second step is to let the milk cool until temperature reaches 44 degree Celsius. Next, live bacteria are mixed into the milk which is also known as Yogurt starter.

Now at the fourth step, again milk cools down for around 4 hours until temperature reaches 37 degree Celsius or 100 degree Fahrenheit. At the fifth step, the yogurt is almost ready and we keep it in the refrigerator for cooling purpose. After that, we add some sugar and strawberries. At this stage, yogurt is ready to eat.

Finally, small cups are filled and packed with fresh yogurt and kept in a delivery van. Then, delivery van ships the packets to the stores.

Passage 2 Total words 175
The given table shows the sales of a coffee shop at four different time on a weekday in an office building.

It can be seen that at 7.30-10.30, pastries sale is the highest in the whole day and slightly more than coffee, while sandwiches have lowest sale in the morning, which is equal to sale of tea in the afternoon. Sale of tea is highest in the morning than the rest of the day, which is 110. It is noticeable that sandwiches sale at 200 is the highest at the lunch time. However, coffee sale is 185 and pastries sale decreases to 95 from 275.

At 2.30-5.30, pastries sale again increases to 150. In contrast, sandwiches sale decreases to 40, but slightly higher than tea which 35 the lowest sale in the whole day. In the night time, pastries sale decreases and sandwiches sale increases to 110. Similarly, sales of coffee and tea also increase.

It is clear that coffee has almost the similar sale throughout the day. By contrast, rest of the products has some variations in their sale.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Feb 15, 2014   #2
Hellloooo...,

It is nicer if you could attach the picture(s), so it will make your readers easy to comment your visual writings.

Thanks and Good luck :)
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Feb 15, 2014   #3
The given diagram describes the process of making yogurt. It can be seen that there are six steps in this process.

Hey.... where is the diagram? Upload it using "Attach file(s)" feature in the message block. It is important for us to have a look at your diagram to give you meaningful feedbacks :)

The given diagram describes the process of making yogurt. It can be seen that there are six steps in this process.

This task is about report writing. So try to report your observations accurately and direct. Use a more formal report writing style. The above two sentences can be put into one easily;

The diagram illustrates the six step process of making yogurt.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 16, 2014   #4
hi kimkitty, same like eddies comment

t is nicer if you could attach the picture(s), so it will make your readers easy to comment your visual writings.

this help us to understand your essay.
OP kimkitty 1 / 2  
Feb 18, 2014   #5
I am trying to attach jpeg file but it is saying unable to attach :( size is 1310 KB. Please help me.
OP kimkitty 1 / 2  
Feb 18, 2014   #6
Pictures are attached now :)





eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Feb 18, 2014   #7
the lowest sale

is the highest NOUN in

than that of the rest of the day

pastries sale decreases and sandwiches sale increases to 110.

if compared to the sales of pastries showing a marked decrease, sandwiches put 110 pieces up for the sales.
Thanks


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