Some people argue that history is of little and no use to us.

significance of history

Hi there, here is my writing task 2 about topic "Some people argue that history is of little and no use to us. Others believe that studying history gives many benefits. Discuss those views and give your own opinion". Please help to review and give me your feedback. Thank you!

There have been some arguments about significance of history. The proponents of the study of history think that it is still one of crucial knowledge, while opponents of this argument believe that history is unnecessary. This essay will discuss both of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

The main reason of believing is that studying history is unnecessary as its knowledge focuses on dates, time and events which cannot be applied in real life. For instance, students studying science and technology can do experiments to create new invention which might improve life quality. While students learning history cannot use their knowledge to build up or create factual outcomes. Additionally, nowadays in modern life, people need to learn new knowledge especially technology and economics more importantly, which helps them easily adapt with changes. As a result, if people study history, they will be out updated and lacking of practical skills to help them survive in a non-stop developing society.

However, I do believe history still plays a crucial role in our life. Firstly, through history, human can learn from their ancestor's failure in the past to avoid repeating mistakes or even find a better way to improve. For example, in the past, people thought that war was a good way to develop the economy, however, it brought more tragedy than benefits. From knowing this wrong perspective, modern human has changed to cooperate with others to improve their own economy together. Secondly, by learning about the historical events, monuments or heroes from the past, human would understand the meaning of their cultures and value of historical tradition heritages, which help them to enhance their awareness of reserving heritages that have been damaged.

In pithy, even though history knowledge is rarely applied in the real life nowadays, I think it still play an essential role to let the contemporary people have a lucid comprehension of past and present.

Mai, I prefer to point out your grammar mistakes first. That way you have a better idea as to how you will be scored in the GRA and C&C section. The more errors you have, the lesser your score in those sections will be.

You have an unclear phrase in the part where you say "new invention'. Since the first word was experiment, that means the invention is new. So you created a redundancy in the statement that lessened the clarity of the information you were providing. In the second paragraph, you do not need the word "of" after the verb "lacking". There is no need for a determiner at that point. You need to practice using the connecting word "the" where required as well, such as in the statement "about THE significance of history". You appear to have a problem with the use of determiner words such as "is, if, the, etc." You should review the rules regarding how to properly use these words with nouns or verbs and remember it for future writing application.

Don't use old English words such as pithy. While it sounds impressive, unless you have a dictionary beside you at the test center, you won't be able to use such impressive words from ancient English. Just use simple, everyday, current English words as those will be more than enough to increase your LR score. In addition to that, your word choice does not apply to the statement you are trying to make because the meaning of the word is "concise and forcefully expressive". It does not sound natural in the presentation, specially since you are an ESL.

The essay format you have given here is incorrect. This is a 5 paragraph essay because the instruction asks you to provide an explanation for 2 public points of view along with a personal point of view. So the format is:

1. Paraphrase
2. Public POV 1
3. Public POV 2
4. Personal Opinion based on an analysis of the 2 public POV
5. Concluding summary

Your essay is only partially responsive to the prompt because of the missing second public point of view. So your score will be limited to the areas where you represent the prompt, which may not be high enough to help you pass since you have several mistakes that will cause points deductions on your part.