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Childhood is the period of building skills like speaking an international language


ReskiRamadani88 43 / 57 5  
Nov 29, 2016   #1
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Children is the period to improve more skills like international language. People regard that studying a foreign language well when they are study in primary school than secondary school. Personally, I believe that learning at the first education in school for children brings more benefit than drawbacks. This essay will discuss the merit of learning at first education of child and then, explanation of negative effect if kids learn other language than their local language.

Nowadays, system education has put international language in the lesson of students, especially primary schools. This regulation have positive effect to increase kids knowledge about another language. Besides, children who have 7-10 years more easy to pick up other languages than teenagers. Because their brain quickly accept information so, it is good way for teaching pupils when they are in primary schools. It is refers to explanation of Putra at Indonesia University, he said 65% children in Bogor elementary school more easy to understand and remember of vocabulary in foreign language than student in high school level. Because child have good ability to memorize in their brain than teenagers.

On the other hand, knowing other language when begin to school more efficient to development career of kids, it directly makes them easy communicating with other from abroad. And when star for the next level education, kids will not get problem to study about international language because they good basic when primary school. However, it is good but there is advantages of this situation. Children will more respect a foreign language than their local language. But it will not have big problem as long as their environment always uses their mother language.

In conclusion, learning other language in elementary school more effective to develop basic skill of kids, so they will not get problem when want to start study in secondary level. Although, it will make them do not more understand their local language.(318w).

Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Nov 29, 2016   #2
Hallo riski.. here my suggestion toward your essay..

ChildrenChildhood is the periodto improve more skills ...
... the first education in of school for children ...
This essay will discuss the merit of learning at first education of childand then, explanation of negative effect if kids learn other language than their local language.

riski.. i found something odd about your essay starting from your introduction. You have achieved to put what the advantages briefly in your introduction, however you did not make it outweigh than its drawbacks. You give same number of each benefit and disadvantage. Moreover, your drawbacks is not appropiate i guess. Perphaps your essay will be better if you explain the disadvantages of learn international languages since primary school not about comparison with local language. You must make your introduction attractive thus reader will continue to read on your body paragraph. Keep writing and Good Luck


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