However, some people are purely against this, stating that the education will be affected in a bad manner.
.... here your idea is not presented properly. You need to tell that they are against for this idea because they think that these children would be deprived of recieving a proper education which may affect their future negatively.
First of all, they get the opportunity to gain the practicalaspectexposure of what is being taught in the school, for example, how to record accounts in ledgers and how to work as a cashier.
Next, there are centers where the board and logging, meals and uniforms are provided free of charge and it is a very good way to overcome financial deficiencies.
.... this idea really does not go well with the rest...may be it's the way you presented.
Also I suggest you to have one reason and one speicifc example for para. That would help you manage time too :)
Anyway.... this is a good essay :)