In what ways are children affected by their friend ? How can parents make sure this influence is positive ?
I think you should add 2 sentences to the end of the first paragraph. One sentence should answer the first question above, and the other should answer the other question above.
When you used the word ENCOUNTER, it was not correct. That word means something like "MEET." I might encounter a bear when I climb the mountan, for example. Use the word UTILIZE instead of ENCOUNTER in that part of the essay.
I enjoyed your essay, even though it has some errors. I think it is important for parents to communicate with children so that they can exert a positive influence and help the children make sense of the negative influences. You wrote something like that here:
There are several efficient methods that parents can utilize. One of all these methods is to try to instruct children to classify how reasonable their
friends ' opinion are. --very good!
Some opinions should be l
earnt as a life 's experienced, while others should be eliminated.
:-)