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Should children learn a foreign language since their childhood in schools?


Becool 4 / 6  
Jun 30, 2011   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Learning is an important part of our lives. Throughout our lives, we learn many things. The more we learn, the more knowledge we have. The more know we have, the more value we gain in the society. Learning depends on our time and energy that we spend for it. Learning anything from a very childhood helps to gain a deep knowledge in a particular field. Some people think that children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school while others disagree. In my view, children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school for two important reasons.

First, learning will be much more easy. In this globalized world of today, a particular place is no longer a fixed habitat for people. People are moving all over the world for business, for visiting new places, and for jobs. So, we should learn as many language as we can. However, learning a new language is not easy as pie. It requires hard work, iron determination, a clear headed focus, and abundance of time. So, learning from childhood should help in learning a lot. When you are in your professional career, you barely have enough time to learn something new and different. Even if you take a stab at learning a new language, there are too many things to learn. And, all those things will be very difficult to retain in mind in a short time. And, if you learn the same language from childhood, all those new words along with other things will stay in your mind for forever being non-erasable. With this, we learned that learning a foreign language is easy when you learn from childhood.

Second, it may take children to a path of success. If you want to study abroad, which is very likely today, then you need to have knowledge of that country's language. Because that will be the medium of your exchange for communication in a school. Mastering a language will not only help students but also one who wants to a businessman. Today, dealing with business parties involves communicating in many countries. You may want to buy raw materials from a company in Japan, you may want sell you products in the United States, and your branches may be in Nepal while corporate office may be in London. So, at least you have to have a knowledge of a common language through which you could talk to every places. These are the benefits if you know a foreign language. I know one of my friends who has been learning English for five years. He has his degree M.B.A in Marketing. Because of a lack of fluency in English, he could not look for job opportunities in the international companies. He always regrets that why he did not learn English from very early childhood when he was in the school.

Last but not least, children should learn a foreign language since they are in a school. It does not only make the learning easy but also shapes a fruitful path for the future. All the parents should think globally now, and make a wise decision regarding helping their children to learn a foreign language since their school.

andytranhung 4 / 7  
Jun 30, 2011   #2
I see that you hardly make grammatical mistakes ( except for those mentioned above by Ajit rai) but most of your sentences are too short and quite simple. Make sure that you can produce some complex structures such as conditional. relative clause or so on and your grade will be better. In addition, learn some synonyms for easy words like "many", "can",.. it would make your essay more various and interesting to read.
apieceof 3 / 5  
Jun 30, 2011   #3
Hi! Becool. Here is my suggestion to your essy. You have very good ideas to strengthen your statement. However, there are
some grammer mistakes in academic writing. You used "And,"So" on the beginning of sentences which is not so formal.
because For/And/Nor/So/But/Or/Yet are called "coordinate conjunction" and their main usage is to connect two clauses.
Use some trasitional words at the beginning like "Therefore", "Furthermore" in your essay.

That is just my small opinion. If you have any idea, please feel free to reply.
You are doing a great job.
start208 14 / 68  
Jun 30, 2011   #4
collegue give good advice. I like your essay and like more the way mates dealt with.
Good luck


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