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China has the greatest number of population in the world, while United States is the richest country


LaPolo11 12 / 28  
Apr 4, 2016   #1
The bar graph compares the population of world and the the method where wealth is distributed in different regions across continent around the world. Overall, the world population statistics are inversely proportion to wealth distribution. I any case, china has the gratest number of pupulation while nort america is the rishest country

A closer to look the data, the proportion of North America has the largest percentage of global wealth, just approximately under 35%. Nonethelss, this figure is actually about seven times lower compared to its population. Similar trend is experienced to Europe and most of the rich countries in Asia-Pacific, with 15% and 5% of inhabiant respectively,.

Apart from previous discussion, there are a number of inhabitant is higher than budget such as China, India, Africa, Latin America and the Caribbean, and other areas in Asia-Pacific. The highest point is China has the highest percentage of people, accounting for about 25% of world's population, but only 4% of total wealth. This also happens in India, with over 15% of the global population, but only 1% of wealth.




wahyu 16 / 28 1  
Apr 4, 2016   #2
What app bro LaPolo, your essay is good, i have suggestions to your introduction paragraph.

you could use this pattern :
1. Reserve some of the information, paraphrase and use some synonyms.
2. Overview the information

I any case, china has thegratest number of pupulation while nort america is the rishest country

my suggestion :
A breakdown of the number of world population and the distributed mechanism in different nations across the continent around the earth are revealed in the bar graph. Overall, it can be seen that the world population statistics are inversely proportion to wealth distribution. on the other hand, China has the hugest number of community while North America is the richest country

I hope that my suggestions help you, correct me if i do mistakes.


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