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The cinema viewing vigures for all films, in millions

Diazalichsan 3 / 6 1  
Jan 4, 2017   #1

The popularity of cinemas across the world

The table illustrates the total spectators in four different genre of movies in India, Ireland, New Zealand, and Japan. The main fact that stand out is action movie became the highest figure of all genre, while horror is the latest of all.

Looking at the figures, action genre shows the highest spectator of all genre, with total of 29.9 million viewers, India dominates action movie at 8 million. This was followed by Ireland, New Zealand, and Japan with 7.6, 7.2 and 7.1 respectively.

Turning to another, with total of 15.8 million, horror movie experience the lowest spectators of all genre. Moreover, Japan shows the lowest with only 2.2 million, compared with Ireland being the highest viewers in horror at 6.4, afterwards, it followed by New Zealand at 4.7 million and India at 2.5 million. Meanwhile, from overall perspective, India leads the number of spectators in all genres at 24.5 million in total. This is in contrast to Japan which occupy the lowest total of viewers.

nandasharma 14 / 53 9  
Jan 4, 2017   #2
I've made the following edits to your article:

The main fact that stand out is action movie ...

The outstanding fact from the data is that the action movie had the highest figure of all while the horror secured the least....

Turning to another, with total of 15.8 million...

While observing another statistics, the horror movie experiences the lowest audience population of all the genres with the total of just 15.8 million....

Meanwhile, from overall perspective...

To cut a long way short, India leads the number of...

Overall your presentation of the data is fine, but I'd recommend you to structure your article in just two paragraphs.
ayuriska 7 / 13 1  
Jan 13, 2017   #3
hai @Diazalichsan
i think you should explain bit about other genres like romance and comedy, instead of describing all of the number in action/horor (perhaps you can just pick the highest and lowest)

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thanks and good luck

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