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Cities need to preserve historic buildings or destroy and replace them?


aysa 1 / -  
Jul 23, 2010   #1
Recently the Chinese government has approved a bill of rebuilding the Kashger old city, which is 1500years old and the main heritage of Uyghur culture, a significant culture of Central Asia. Although I confess that historical buildings have negative effect on urban landscape, I cannot visualize a city without its historical structure.

First of all, an old building can insinuate historical events which happened in the city. Old buildings, as a symbol of architectural heritage, memorize the significant episodes. When looking at the shabby Rome city, with its almost devastated temples, demolished palace, it is not hard to imagine the prosperous kingdom of the ancient Rome. We can also acknowledge that these buildings were ruined after the kingdom was vanquished by the enemy. Thus, historic buildings are one fundamental method by which we can learn about significant events in history.

Furthermore, historic buildings are the indispensable integrity of culture. For example, an old Arabic mosque is more likely have a geometric decoration style, while a Chinese traditional temple has a pitched roof and is made of wood. If we substitute our historic buildings with the modern one, isn't it similar with alternating our culture with the prevalent one?

Finally, it is our obligation to pass all historical buildings to the next generation. While it is true that we can transmit the civilization of our ancestors` by picture or in text form, which is vague and not authentic, we could also preserve the genuine buildings, tangible to the next generation. Only via the real trip to the Blue Mosque, Istanbul's imperial Mosque, are our next generations capable of acquainting an impressive view of the Turkish culture.

Nevertheless maintaining historic buildings needs a tremendous amount of money and old buildings are easily destroyed by earthquake, the cultural value of a historical building is worth preserving on economic grounds. To learn more about history, to more distinguish from other culture and for the next generations` sake, stop destroying the historic buildings!

Tetanya 6 / 21  
Jul 23, 2010   #2
, I cannot visualize a city without its historical structures .
Yayz 10 / 121  
Jul 23, 2010   #3
What exactly do you mean with "insinuate?"

historical events that happened
This site might help you out with some grammar bits like the use of that v. which:
grammarbook.com/grammar/whoVwhVt.asp

as symbols of

memorize the significant episodes

I think "memorize" is not being used correctly here...
merriam-webster.com/dictionary/memorize

Looking at the shabby Rome city

devastated temples and demolished palace

We can also acknowledge thatThese buildings were ruined after the kingdom was vanquished by the enemy; thus, historic buildings are one fundamental method by which we can learn about significant events in history.

an old Arabic mosque is more likely to have a

buildings with the modern one

isn't it similar with alternating our culture with the prevalent one?

I think this should be re-worded. Something like, "are we not abandoning our historic culture to rest solely on the modern one?" or getting rid of the question all together and making it a statement.

obligation to pass on all historical buildings

which is vague and inauthentic

tangible to the next generation.

Try swapping "tangible" for a word like "accessible"

capable of acquainting themselves with an

Neverthelless, maintaining historic buildings requires a tremendous amount of money and old buildings are easily destroyed by earthquakes.Still, the cultural value of a historical building is worth preserving even on economic grounds. To learn more about history, to more distinguish from other cultures, and for the next generations' sake,

stop destroying the historic buildings!

Do you really want to get this emotional? How formal is this essay?

Well, I hope my suggestions helped =)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 25, 2010   #4
...cannot visualize a city without its historical structure. -- add one more sentence here to make your point. There is room for another sentence, and by adding another sentence you can "sharpen" the thesis. That means you can make a main idea for the essay, and that idea will be even more distinct.

You write very well!! You should feel fortunate to have somehow become so talented!

In the last para, like the first para, you have room to add another sentence. It is good to have at least 4 sentences in a paragraph. In normal conversation, some people interrupt before you even finish one sentence, but in an essay you get to use lots of sentences to make your point. Adding one more sentence at the end of a paragraph can "sharply" burn an idea into a reader's mind.


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