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City life is complicated or comfortable


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Apr 1, 2017   #1
Some say living in the city is more comfortable. Other however claim that city life is complicated.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.


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There is contentious issue among citizen whether city life is convenient or not. While there are some benefits gained when deciding to live in the city, there might be some disadvantages should not be overlooked.

On the one hand, those supporting that people are easy to do their activities when living in the city often claim that many public infrastructur can support various kind of activities done by them. For example, if someone wants to take an IELTS test, it will be much cheaper and more efficient to take an IELTS test if they live in the city. Accesible information is also better in the city than in the village. People who are living far from city sometimes get lack of information, the one and only news they got is just from radio station.

On the other hand, the opponents of city life argue that the stressful thing living in the city is mostly because of their traffic congestion. People sometimes take some breakfast and even working on the way they go to work in the early morning due to avoiding the traffic congestion. Living in the city also makes the community life is more individual. People close their door all the day, go to work in the morning and are back home in the evening. Moreover, people in the city mostly have a big fence of house so, it is impossible to talk with their neighbour.

In conclusion, while living in the city is in favour with some advantages given, I also believe that there should be a measure taken to cope with problems which might appear when becoming a city-settler.
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Apr 1, 2017   #2
Rodiah, the essay clearly states that you are supposed to discuss both public views before your discuss your personal opinion in the essay. There is no indication in your essay of a discussion of both opinions prior to your point of view. That is because you did not properly restate the prompt topic and instructions in your opening statement. Considering that there are a few missing sentences in your opening statement, it is clear that you either forgot the instructions, so it did not reflect in the essay paraphrased statement or, you did not understand the instructions. Since the essay did not represent the prompt requirements in the discussion, as you only discussed one part of the essay requirements, the score for your essay will not be higher than a 4. If you wish to score higher than this in your next practice test, make sure that you properly assess the prompt requirements and then develop the discussion properly in your essay. Do not bother to rewrite this essay for this prompt. Once you have been scored, that grade is final. You do not get to repeat the IELTS test so you don't get to repeat your practice essays either. This is a real time assessment of your work and the score is final. By the way, the essay has some misspellings and also problems with grammar development. While the grammar is not very good, there are allowances given for that in the scoring system. As long as you are understood by the reader, then your score in that aspect could be passing. It is problem with the prompt requirement and subsequent discussion that really pulled down your score.


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