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It is often claimed that males and females have got different type of abilities and shortcomings.

Abrorjon 1 / 1 1  
Nov 27, 2016   #1
Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses.

Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender ?

It is often claimed that males and females have got different type of abilities and shortcomings. I personally hold the opinion that it is wrong to treat them in workplace because of their gender.

In today's world both men and women have the equally rights in education, public and organizations. In other words, both of them can have access to the same educational opportunities, this means that they can have the same professional and educational skills. To illustrate, In the UK there are similar numbers of male and female students in higher education. In addition, now women can compete with men in any kind of field even in sport. For instance, they were often employed as secretaries or receptionists, but today they are able to even be a supervisor or strong politicians. Nevertheless, traditionally women have been restricted to certain roles such as builder or fireman.

On the other hand, still it is widely believed that both of sexes have got inequally talents and disabilities. In fact, it can be observed that in military services mainly men are employed as a result of their aggressive and brave character, whereas women are often employed in kindergarden and schools. Therefore, there have certain jobs which only one of the gender member do it perfectly. For instance, males are good at army as a soldier while females are better in hospitals as a nurse and in primary schools as a teacher. Nonetheless, in our modern life it is unfair discriminate them because of their sexes, since they can do anything at the same quality as their opponent gender do.

To sum up, it seems to me that it is true both of them have got pros and cons, but nowadays a wide range of occupations are available to both gender and also career success depends on individual merit.
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Nov 27, 2016   #2
Abror, is this a topic that you chose by yourself to discuss? Or was this a topic assigned for discussion in class? The prompt doesn't seem complete to me. There seem to be some missing elements in the instructions that I can see reflected in your response. Would it be too much of a bother for you to post the complete prompt? That is if the instructions were given in class and is not something that you just chose to discuss. Your task accuracy score will depend upon it.

In the general review of your essay though, I would have to say that you did a pretty good job of defending your stance. However, you should try to always do your comparison of the skills of men and women in the same field. Take for example, your discussion about gender roles in the military. Both the men and women already fight on the front lines of the battle field. Therefore, it is wrong for you to say that men work better in the battlefield and the women work better in the background. You need to increase your knowledge of world events and gender discussions in order to better and more accurately develop your gender discussions. Use of no longer applicable information, such as the case of the military example could have an adverse effect on your score as well.
OP Abrorjon 1 / 1 1  
Nov 27, 2016   #3
sorry, It is my first time to write essay on this site .thank you very much for your comments

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