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Clear indicator of a great nation is the common well-being of all its people.

nikhiltinder 1 / -  
Sep 18, 2017   #1
Issue: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general well-being of all its people.

the comfort of a regular citizen

In general, Great is a term depicts the distinguishing qualities that make someone or something great. The statement denotes the cause to become a great nation, that depends on the comfort of general citizen.Indeed, the most plausible, significant basis of a great nation lies in the citizen's welfare.

If common people get treated impartially, that is the indication of a great nation.In India, before the 21st century, there is a castism.The higher hierarchy people had been living in pleasure, while lower hierarchy people had been incurring.The nation had a wide gap between poor and rich, low class and high-class people. Higher class people were happy, in contrary lower class people suffered humiliation. In such circumstances, the nation cannot be called great.

The citizen of the country plays a major role in development and advancement of the country.Each and everyone's contribution helps to regulate the country.For example, farmers provide food to us.The doctor treats people's illness.Teachers teaches people in order to aware them about the world. Everyone is special.The country becomes great with the support of these people.

Many people in the country become worldwide personalities through their extraordinary achievements.Does that mean the country is great? In India, there are lots of actors with worldwide fame. Their achievements make them great.They are known as great people who belongs to India, not the people belong to the great nation.This makes a difference.The achievements of people are rather personal than national.

Although scientist, artist, rulers help to enhance the development of the nation, the greatness of nation does not totally dependent on them.As a conclusion, with the every citizen of the nation, whether the citizen is an ordinary man or a famous person, the country will be a great nation by cherishing its people and take care of them.

MelindaLinda 2 / 4  
Sep 19, 2017   #2

1) "Great is a term depicts...": it should be "a term which/that depicts"
2) "general citizen": it's "general citizens" (plural)
3) "there is a castism": there WAS a castism (you're talking about BEFORE 21st century)
4) "scientist, artist..": use plural
5) "with the every citizen of the nation": "the" isn't necessary
6) "by cherishing its people and take care of them": "and TAKING care of them"
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,848 2137  
Sep 19, 2017   #3
Nikhil, you can very possibly score a 4 with this essay. You were able to show a clear understanding of the prompt topic and your discussion proves that you have the ability to make yourself understood by the reader on using average considerations. You could have scored higher with your essay presentation had you properly paraphrased the topic for discussion as an introduction to the topic rather than trying to define what the word "great" means. the definition of the word, in your understanding, is not as effective as when you might have tried to first, depict a restatement of the original argument presented. The rest of the essay, starting from the second paragraph, is pretty good. Your use of the caste system that exists in India helped you to better illustrate your given discussion opinion. However, you have a problem with the spacing in your sentence presentations. Do not forget to press the space bar between finished sentences so that the reader will not have a hard time differentiating where the old sentence ends and the new one begins. Overall, you have a pretty decent attempt at writing this essay. If you apply the changes I am suggesting here in your next essay, that essay should garner you a better score.

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