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What can you do about the climate crisis? Al Gore talk about the climate


ALMAJID14 5 / 5  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
Summarry of TED Video, The title : Al Gore-Averting the climate crisis

I want to focus on what many of people have said you would like me to elaborate, what can you do about the climate crisis? I am going to show new images. I update the slide every time and add new images. I learn more about it whenever I want it. Now in United states, we got new temperature about 31 degrees and last month was 39 degrees.

Cars and trucks which caused our climate like this, is called global warming pollution which come from building than transportation. Public transportation is one of trouble maker to global warming in this day. We have to care about problem which threaten our life with doing some positive activity like efficiency in transportation, conservation, electricity. It is not true activities but it is true activities.

Furthermore, it is good solution to solve the problem that we have to be a green consumer. You have choices with everything you buy, between things that have a harsh effect, or a much less harsh effect on the global climate crisis. Make a decision to live a carbon-neutral life. It is easier than you think. It really is. A lot of us in here have made that decision, and it is really pretty easy. It can reduce the big problem anything about climate which is this condition not good for our health in these days.

fadhilmd25 41 / 75 11  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
Dear Mr. Majid, here is some of tips for you:

The grammar is good but the summary needs to avoid word of I, as it is a passive way of summarize the lecture of someone

The use of tenses are well placed, but sometimes you can use complex sentence instead of compound sentence to simplify the meaning of each sentence.

The main topic of each paragraph can be identified, it is clear to distinguish them.
cohesion needs to be improved by saying something that relates for each paragraph
rian31 14 / 22  
Sep 14, 2016   #3
hai majid
it is interesting summary
please give me a chance to correct some word

I updates the slide every time ...

... is called global warming pollution which prefer tobecause you use than in next word come from ...
We have to care about problem, which threaten...

... problem that we have to be a green consumer(maybe you must to explain about this words) . You have choices with everything that you buy between (...), or a much less harshmaybe you must arrange your vocabulary to be more powerful sentence just like change it with hard or strong effect on the global climate crisis.

I think it is enough
thanks
Keep struggle buddy
mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 14, 2016   #4
hi madjid,,let me give you several advice

I want to focus on what many of most people have said you would like me to elaborate , what can you do about the climate crisis climate change?

... climate like this, is calledglobal warming pollution which come from ...
... of trouble maker to contribute global warmingin this nowadays.

Make a decision to live a carbon-neutral life. It is easier...

#the most problems that you have is building sentences dude,


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