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IELTS Task 1: Coffee exports in 3 different nations.


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Feb 11, 2015   #1
The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012.

The line graph provides the information with regard to the amount of coffee exported from three different countries; Brazil, Colombia, and Costa Rica; from 2002 to 2012, over the 10-year period. It is measured in kilograms of millions.

It is noticeable that what stands up from the graph examines that in general trend, all countries experienced an upward trend in the end of the period. However, the amount of coffee exported in three nations fluctuated in the reminder of the time.

The striking point is that there was a dramatic rise in the coffee exports in Brazil and Colombia. Brazil's exportation of coffee accounted for 60 kilograms of millions in 2002, higher than the other two countries. Standing in contrast, the amount of coffee exports in this country increased dramatically over the next 6 years, while 2008 to 2010 witnessed a moderate drop between 20 million and around 22 million of exported coffee levels in Brazil . However, the amount of coffee exports in Brazil inclined slightly onwards. In terms of coffee exports, Columbia hit a low of amount which was approximately 3 million in 2008, whereas from 2008 to 2012 the amount of coffee exports rose suddenly.

A closer look at the data reveals that Costa Rica pointed out the highest amount of exported coffee in the beginning the period at 15 million, although this figure showed a dramatic fall from 2002 to 2006 between 15 and 12 million, a drop of 3 kilograms of millions. Having said and that, Costa Rica's exportation of coffee recovered significantly towards the next 7 years, representing roughly 20 kilograms of millions.




eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Feb 11, 2015   #2
the 10-year period

This is the first time you mention, so Indefinite article is needed: A 10-year period

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Semi-colons are not frequently used in contemporary English. Commas are much more common.

the reminder of the time.

This is not reminder . Watch its meaning closely.

the amountnumber of coffee exports

Having said and that

Always imitate the phrase with care. Then, you know how it should be used, not just to copy and cut ;)


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