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IELTS WRITING TASK 1: COFFEE AND TEA BUYING AND DRINKING HABITS IN FIVE CITIES IN AUSTRALIA


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Jul 13, 2020   #1

consumption of coffee and tea and beverage



The bar chart indicates the consumption of coffee and tea and beverage preferences in five cities in Australia, namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart.

Regarding cafe visits, Melbourne has the highest proportion of dwellers having gone to a cafe for coffee or tea in the last four weeks, with approximately 64%, followed by Hobart (63%) and Sydney (61%). More than half of respondents in Brisbane reported recent cafe visits, while the lowest figure is for Adelaide at under 50%.

In terms of the purchase of the two types of coffee, instant coffee is favored over the fresh one. The majority of residents (54%) bought instant coffee in last month in Hobart. Brisbane, Adelaide, and Melbourne have roughly 53%, 50% and 48% respectively, whereas only about one in four of those surveyed in Sydney responded doing so. By contrast, Sydney has the largest percentage of residents having bought instant coffee last month with 44%. Melbourne, the second largest, has 42%, followed by Hobart with 8% lower. Equivalent statistics are seen in Brisbane and Adelaide with more than a third.

In summary, the illustration suggests that there is a positive correlation between the proportion of inhabitants going to a coffee shop and the proportion of fresh as well as instant coffee consumed.

(Thank you for your feedback in advance.)



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Jul 13, 2020   #2
There is a misconception that the more words you write, the more chances you have of passing the test. That is entirely false information. When you write an essay, specially a task 1 essay, you have to take note of the time provided for your writing task. The time provided is 20 minutes. Within 20 minutes you have to:

- Brainstorm your discussion approach
- Take note of important information based on the writing instructions
- Write your draft report
- Review, revise, edit, and finalize the report

You have to do all of these within 20 minutes. You should not just write immediately, making up the information as you go along. The Task 1 essay needs to be short, quickly written, but still informative as per the instruction requirements. That said, 211 words means you will be cutting into your Task 2 writing time of 40 minutes when you go through the report finalization process. That is never a good idea. That is why you are asked to write just enough words, within 175-190 words. That leaves you with enough time to create the perfect essay presentation.

The Task 1 essay requires you to write short, informative sentences. You do this by presenting related sentence information in the paragraph between 3-5 sentences. Keep it short, informative, and without the use of run on sentences. Your essay uses the run-on presentation throughout. That will definitely affect your GRA score. You should do your best to use clear sentences. Make your thoughts known without using too many words. Keep it short. The ultra descriptive discussion should be reserved for the Task 2 essay that allows you write more words. You do not need to summarize the information at the end of your report. That is what the summary overview is for, the first paragraph of the task 1 essay.

Write the essay using a 3 paragraph format. The 4 paragraph format often ends up with the students writing more words, but making more grammar and presentation errors as evidenced by your work. I can use this essay as the basis of reviewing your next essay. Now I know what your writing style is like and I was able to point out the biggest problem of your essay, conciseness. Work on that problem in the next essay so that I can review the other presentation errors in your work.


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